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Here you go Symptomless Coma: 982 words of Iambic Pentameter that draw from Homer, with influences from Virgil, William Blake and the Epic of Gilgamesh. I even managed to squeeze in a nod to Dante. Included are the long list and extended simile that you specifically wanted, and I've tried to adhere to the conventions of the form while telling a story that isn't utterly formulaic. Whether or not this wins, I sincerely hope you like it, as you earned it.pre:My voice upraised toward the sky in song, I call my patron Muse. In youth I would Frequently write soft words to earn your smile, Yet now I tarnish every syllable Invoking you for competition's sake. The gods of Thunder rule this work be now writ: With heavy heart to them I must submit. Sing we the song of Cleon's fall with Urn. Tyger, profane Tyger, burning brightly, Through forest deep and dry it stalked Sly Urn and Cleon both, their men long dead And bronze made molten ruin. Cleon ran With Urn within his arms and screamed in fear. Betrayed they both had been, and now the beast Might burn the towns and kill again. Yet first It came for Urn the sharp of eye, its mark Upon his flesh and hunger on its tongues. Fair Cleon could yet hurl him down and flee, Hero not he, but bonds of purpose held The men together fast, as did memory. Met they within the charnel house, once home To Urn the sharp of eye, all people gone As ash upon the wind save he. Sly Urn With bow accosted Cleon from afar, Demanding "Who are you to come this way? Dressed bright in bronze and fair of look are you, But none know more than I that evil walks Aflame with grace. Be gone before I shoot This barb into your heart!" Not idle was His threat, for many men had met their end Unknowing whence the blow had came, or how So small a man could shoot so far and true. Now Cleon fair removed his helm and laughed, Stentorian as booming voice that once Against the edge of all the earth was raised. He was a man still young and strong, untried By world, untroubled he, for hopelessly The path ahead appeared to have no end. "A target fair I am to you," said he, "Without this guard upon my head. Might you Let loose against a man still garbed in bronze And cut him low, then you may be the sort To aid this fair villain. For murderous The course upon which I set out today." Sly Urn beheld the truth, many the times Deceit tried creep into the hunter's home. Like poor Tiresias blind-struck, mere chance Left him alive but changed for worse compared To who had he in youth once been. Also Like poor Tiresias blind-struck, skill rare Had come in wake of tragedy, the bow The means allowing Urn to years survive. Unlike Tiresias blind-struck, no god With gift or curse had come, his sight still keen, Still clear the gaze of Urn the sharp of eye. "The beast you seek: I saw it long ago." Tyger, profane Tyger, burning brightly, Through tree and smoke it came for them, narrow Its eye and fierce its roar. 'Neath canopy In darkness Cleon stumbled far, heavy The load of Urn the sharp of eye. For miles Too great to count he gave a great account: Onward he pressed when breath had left his chest And only fear endured. Not only fear! For kinship held to him when hope had fled As like a lover holds when lust is spent. Hero not he, Cleon bereft of bronze Ran from the boughs and saw the cliffs distantly. With men in tow across the land they searched, Until at last its tracks Urn spied upon The sand beside the cliffs: glassen the steps Left by the beast. "Now soon," said Cleon bold, "Revenge will come for Urn the sharp of eye, Too long delayed." Sly Urn was not impressed. "For what, or whom," asked Urn, "do you this quest engage? Some death? Or glory offered you?" Again fair Cleon laughed, then mirth dispersed Lest he offend. "This task," said Cleon low, "To win the praise of maiden bloody, queen Of all within the stormy northern bowl." Said Urn, "The deed alone shall satisfy; Your reasons are your own. Of deed let now We speak. What means the beast can pacify? There! See it moved away from sea? Perhaps A fear we can exploit?" Fair Cleon smiled. "No need," said Cleon sure, "have we of surf Or rain to quell our prey. Advised am I By queen of blood that flame cannot endure With kin, so suffocate the fiend in fire And see it snuffed." Sly Urn was not impressed. "Let us but hope," said Urn, "this queen of blood Is right. The blaze takes all it gives its mark." Tyger, profane Tyger, burning brightly, Through moonless night the pair it chased, On Urn the sharp of eye its brand. At edge Of rock fair Cleon stood, there leaning out To hear the pound of wave on stone as like The axeman counts the time in beats of drum With growing dread and tightened gut, waiting For rare reprieve or time at last his weight To drop. His legs atremble, Cleon held Against his breast sly Urn so small and still. Hero not he, as glowing flame close came Cleon bereft of bronze stayed resolutely. In forest deep and dry a trap was set To catch and kill the seething beast. Know all Who read these stalwart names how great their work: Pallas the still, Nestor the old, Stephan The worthy, Callias serene, spartan Astro, the tall Alexander, Echo The simple, Lucas, son of Callias, Sly Urn and Cleon bright in bronze. All ten Began the night arrayed against the fiend. How long they hid! Until at last they heard When Urn the sharp of eye drew breath and cried "Tyger, profane Tyger! Burning brightly!" At once the men to trees set light; behind The smoke the Tyger slunk. Sly Urn was pale With memory rekindled, now he looked Upon that hell again. The moment stretched, The fire toward the sky climbed high, all coughed... Then crashing came the Tyger through the wall. Tyger, profane Tyger, burning too bright, Made strong by forest set alight, so grew That beast of fire, titian and dark. To ash Went eight in flash of hate, and Urn Blinded. Cleon shed bronze, raised Urn, and fled. Tyger, profane Tyger, burning brightly, Approached its prey. As tongues licked rock and scorched His back, fair Cleon gave decree: "No man So brave should fall alone!" So then he leapt To death with Urn, and down into the waves The Tyger plunged with both, at last snuffed out. The ocean wept to feel blind Urn embraced, Her tears of salt welled up to flood the land, And touching Urn upon his ruined face Restored his sight, with kiss retreating back. Hero, he woke as dawn then broke, at peace To hear fair Cleon's laugh upon the bay.
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