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Blarggy posted:It is supposed to start at his home with him waking up, and getting ready with his younger sister, where I had intended to include a basic introduction to the character. The problem was, in my haste to get the explosion scene out of my head, I sort've skipped to it much quicker than intended. For the love of God, please do not start a story with the protag waking up. That poo poo is amateur hour and I'd rather you start the story on the sentence where the bank explodes instead of the sentence where Toby gets up and eats a piece of toast.
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