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supermikhail posted:Why would anyone want to get better at poetry, Ugh.
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# ¿ Jan 9, 2013 00:16 |
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# ¿ Mar 28, 2024 20:15 |
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Too Late She pulled me down closer and waited for me to speak, or turn my head, or lean so far in she could taste my breath. I held the tail of those seconds, scratching to the later seconds growing from her chapped lips, from powdered skin textured like an ant hill; growing into wrinkles, into a house a car and children. Her lips spread in tiny gaps like whispering, and I could hear us far from now, like radio voices over static. We'd lay in bed— our things around us: retirement plaque, pictures of family, fake plants, an untouched guitar grown old in the same house we have, asking each other if we're happy with the choices we've made. I'd stare at the foot of the bed as if reviewing my life; she would nod saying we've done well, ask if I think so too, and I would lie. She pulled me down closer; but I got up and said that I should go now.
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# ¿ Jan 9, 2013 00:30 |
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budgieinspector posted:The poetry class I took last semester drat near destroyed my enjoyment of writing. It's one of the reasons I haven't been posting (or even following) Thunderdome. I literally bet my livelihood on it. If you want it, it's worth it. So gently caress your loser professor and get your rear end putting that loving ink to wood immediately.
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# ¿ Jan 9, 2013 08:48 |
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Incarnate Dao posted:The Cultural Revolution The title needs work. It's too blunt. You don't want an essay title. As for the crafting of it, I can't say that I see an actual poem so much as a two-sentence quip with random line breaks. Kind of like the title, it lacks the subtlety that is the strength of poetry. New poets (and staunch critics of all poetry) often confuse obfuscation for subtlety. You have a message you want to transmit, which is the second sentence. Now, you need to mix it up with some other ingredients so that that idea isn't the only flavor. My advice would be to take what you're trying to do here and write a 50-line poem, but every line/idea should have some sort of musicality and/or artistry to it. Meander a bit, explore, and read it out loud to hear the cadence of the words. Does it flow like a sentence or does it have its own, internal method of being spoken? Anywhere you can, use tools from the poetry toolbox: metaphor, simile, rhyme, alliteration. See what works and what doesn't work. Finally, once you've fooled around and found a good voice for the poem, you can cut it down and make your idea speak in that voice with fresh turns of phrase that will make the reader stop and consider your poem, thus sealing it in their memory. I like to use this Pound poem as an example of all that. It's very short, but it executes its idea (an image that paints an emotional landscape) in an interesting way. ----------------------------------- In a Station of the Metro The apparition of these faces in the crowd; Petals on a wet, black bough. ----------------------------------- Ezra Pound studied Eastern poetry quite a bit, and he even emulated it. However, there is a distinctively Western approach to crafting the words. You can't read the translation of a poem in English and simply mimic it if you want to achieve the same effect. If it's written in a different language, there's so many other factors going on beneath the surface. So, you can adapt Eastern poetic concepts and make them happen in English, but you'll ultimately have to work within the confines of English and its poetic constructs. I'd suggest reading lots of Pound to see what he did and what of that may be useful to you.
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# ¿ Jan 15, 2013 03:27 |
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I've been exploring Sound Poetry, and I'm currently working on my masterpiece, "Wub in the Time of Cholera". It's a dub-step anthem tribute to Marquez. What do you guys think?
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# ¿ Jan 15, 2013 23:24 |
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# ¿ Mar 28, 2024 20:15 |
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Ethanfr0me posted:I'm having trouble with the tense, everything should be in past tense but it just doesn't sound right. I'm not entirely sure what this is you've posted. I don't know how to tell you to go home and write a poem.
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# ¿ Mar 26, 2013 04:36 |