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quote:There is no coffee pile. I manage to scrounge some sealed single-serving pouches of instant from
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quote:Some old Asian army officer-looking guy walks up to Tom and me, followed by two little jackbooted goons in fatigues. The old guy is bent and wrinkly in his crisp uniform. His goons are stern-eyed and metal-helmeted. lol goons!
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real talk you're a genuinely bad writer
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Jun 8, 2014 21:07
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quote:I don't know how this is going to pan out, so right now I'll just enjoy my time on the PATIENCE. She's a good ship, and I've gotten very good at what I do here. I am literally thrilled daily by my successes. the second to last line of your book includes "I am literally thrilled daily..." that is some awkward rear end phrasing imo
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Jun 8, 2014 21:10
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Hobohemian posted:I hate to do this to you, as you have already sacrificed, but could you read and post more? For us. quote:We're panting and sweating by the time we finish. I'm pleased that, during the assault, I'd found time to use the words I’d been saving since our car ride in Cambodia. I remove the dead agent’s slacks, which are much fresher than mine, and clumsily put them on after removing my own.This pleases me to no end. lol the dude who wrote this cant distinguish between Hitman games and real fiction
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Jun 8, 2014 21:43
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quote:This answer is both good and bad. It doesn't seem we're in any immediate danger, but I can't this book is literally insufferable
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Jun 8, 2014 21:46
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"I've seen some dude's prolapsed rear end in a top hat, on the internet."
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Jun 8, 2014 21:47
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basically this book is about a gay, retarded 12 year old's fantasy mary sue time travelling and pining after his retarded friend, tom.
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Jun 8, 2014 21:50
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quote:The back of the dago’s head cracks against the floor and he drops his knife. ya see this greasy wop, ya see, he had gone after a dame tom and i wanted to pause time and rape. he was a little one too, a little milksop, nancy boy,
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Jun 8, 2014 21:53
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Hobohemian posted:Is he writing in the present tense, like a screenplay? he's writing in all tenses, like someone who doesn't know how to write
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Jun 8, 2014 21:54
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the main characteristic of this book is its basically what children think is badass. cigarette smoking, cocaine-using badass ex-military time travelling sodomites go on a century-spanning adventure to have implied sex and beat up jerks. coming 2014.
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Jun 8, 2014 21:58
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WarrenH posted:oh god what have i done let your own book tell u quote:Has the whole world stopped? Have I lost my mind? Is this a new aspect of my brain damage? the answer is yes
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Jun 8, 2014 22:04
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Hole Wolf posted:i'm glad you tried, OP. i'm not. i find it very upsetting he felt he was entitled to try
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southpaugh posted:Wait is it gay I'll read it if its gay i love gay things yeah actually i'm pretty sure it was a paean to the homoeroticism of time travelling navy friendships
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