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Xun posted:So, how exactly do you plan on publishing this without getting hit by GWs copyright inquisitors? I'm unironically curious since wouldn't you have to rewrite the entire thing? I really don't think you can pull a 50 shades here and cntrl-f replace space marines with archangels or whatever. Thats the plan, yup. Draft 0: Copying everything to a google doc. Book 3 is here. (up to thread page 430) Draft 1: Change to third person. Book 1 and 2 is here. Draft 3: Sanitizing everything. I have about 10 pages of different names, cosmologies, etc. Draft 4: Adding different points of view. This ranges from Cruentus to Jazmine to Sebekh. Draft 5: Actually editing. Removing plot lines that didn't go anywhere. Fixing foreshadowing. Then it goes to some proofreaders/actual editors in the Book Barn. Loel fucked around with this message at 09:15 on May 18, 2016 |
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As an afterthought, we need an alternative supply of killers to rend and maim on our command while we do research. No, not the Kreig, the catte. We should build a cattery or use the massive private jungle with variable gravity as a catte to start producing these predators on a case-by-case basis and to keep any apprentices on their toes.
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I feel like anybody trying to court Team WTF's vote fundamentally doesn't get Team WTF.
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AmyL posted:As an afterthought, we need an alternative supply of killers to rend and maim on our command while we do research. No, not the Kreig, the catte. holy poo poo yes please. we've seen how useful Fluors and her proteges have been. bonus points if we have the Krieg raise them from kittens.
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sullat posted:See, this is where Ohone has an opportunity to build a power base. All these desperate hive worlds, what do we have to offer them in exchange for their support? Do we still have that damned STC? What miracles of agri-tech can we whip up? High-yield algae strains? Super efficient recycling system for super high calorie virdigris soy? Plump helmet farms for the under-hives? We need to be a new Athena, offering tech in exchange for loyalty. Someone's been reading Tuf Voyaging.  Main character is a bit dickish, but really love that book.
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(Slice of life?) Awake She had said to trust her, and you always did, but when you woke up in a completely unfamiliar lab, it was hard not to immediately assume the defensive and attempt escape. Not that you could anyway. You were strapped down pretty tightly. Leather-lined metal bands across your wrists, ankles, chest. You tested them, then tried your full strength with your right wrist, and while it creaked, it held. Recon, then. You were on your back on something cold. It looked like a medic bay; there were medical supplies behind glass on recessed shelves. There were also less-than-medical supplies; specimen jars, wires, circuit boards, things you couldn’t recognize. Above you was a lamp on an adjustable arm. You’d expected there to be all number of torture devices, for a medic bay, but it was only a lamp, with plastic wrapped around it. There was a faint hum, somewhere above. Probably the lights, probably the environmental system. Hopefully not anything sinister. But as the moment of It’d been a long time since you’d felt anything like despair, but recent events had definitely warranted it. Your wings were folded awkwardly under your back, then wrapped in something, something very cold; a bony cushion against the table, stripped of their feathers, and you felt revolted by them, and the sickening warpfire you had last seen enveloping them. Revolted by your years of service, by the devotion of the Abrogates, by your own faith. Gritting your teeth, you yanked against the bindings again, to no effect. A medic bay would have scalpels, cauterizers, and while you didn’t have a lot of medical knowledge, you knew enough for battlefield surgery. It was just one of those things that came in handy. Battlefield surgery behind your back? Might be a bit more difficult. You heard the hiss of a door, and a soft clicking on the floor. You looked around, and spotted your wife at the foot of the table; outside her Lord-Sire’s armor, in simple tech-priest robes, like the day you’d met her. Her eyes were weary and sad, and her gaze was the distant stare she had when busy processing or programming something, until she realized you were awake. “Hey.” “Hey.” It came out in a croak. You wondered how long you’d been out. You swallowed and tried again. “Hey. Where are we? How long have I been out?” She flinched. “We’re on Olympus. This is my new lab.” She gestured around halfheartedly. “It’s… not what the old one was, but it’ll do. It’s been a couple of days. I didn’t freeze you for a few millennia.” She smiled half-heartedly. “Joke.” “And what am I doing here?” “Well, you were sleeping until I could get a few fires under control. I didn’t expect you to be awake yet.” She leaned back against the side of the table, then hopped up to sit on it. A faint flicker of amusement surfaced among your despair. She was so petite, you wondered if it grated on her, if that was why she went for the huge and outlandish in all things. You felt your eyebrows raise. “Really? And, I’ve metabolized worse things than whatever sedative you gave me, I’m sure.” You would’ve almost smiled, if it wasn’t so tiring to do so. “So… why am I here?” She didn’t look at you. The hood of her robes obscured her face. You heard a soft clicking, one-two-three-four, metal on metal. She was likely tapping her fingers on the table. “I had to keep you safe. I… didn’t know what you would do if I couldn’t keep an eye on you.” “Surely you trust me more than that?” “Should I? You pulled out a knife and I didn’t know who you were going to kill first, Athena, yourself, or maybe just all of us in quick order.” “I…” the words died on your lips, and you held your gaze for a second, then shifted your wings (hateful heretical things) under your back uncomfortably. “See?” She turned her head, though you could only see one eye. “So I wanted to keep you safe. I have to keep you safe. You’re the most precious thing in the galaxy to me.” “You have the rest of the Family. A devoted cult. Two AIs.” “They’re not you. I need you, Fabiyan. I refuse to let you die. I got you back once, remember?” You sighed and stared up at the adjustable lamp. “It wasn’t worth it.” “You saved my life, literally. Twice. And you don’t know what I went through to get you back.” The clicking ceased, and Ohone’s voice had an edge you weren’t used to, a hurt and anger that she hadn’t turned on you before. “Don’t EVER tell me it wasn’t worth it. I could’ve brought back anyone else, but I need YOU.” You didn’t have an answer to that. You looked at her again, and she was staring at you, angry. As soon as she caught you looking, she looked away again, at the floor. “Hon… I…” “No. I’m not going to argue with you like this. I have work to do.” She hopped down from the table, and began walking around you, collecting supplies, ripping open packages and handing tools to her mechadendrites. “What are you planning to do with all of those?” You asked, with only a note of trepidation. “Are you going to remove these… things?” “No. They’d probably grow back anyway. I remember what happened when this happened to me… sort of.” She ripped open a bag and leaned over your arm, the anti-static fabric of her robe brushing over your exposed skin, and you felt the sting of a needle in your elbow. Another bag, and she unspooled some tubing, hanging fluid from a hook you hadn’t noticed. Within seconds, your body was numb, and the room became slightly foggy. “You’re not going to knock me out?” “I need you awake. I have to check in with you to make sure I’m not screwing up. Trust me. I made Athena teach me how to do it.” “That doesn’t really inspire trust…” you began to say, but she put a finger on your lips. “Just… trust me. Have faith, if not in the God-Emperor, then in me.”
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I have a whole variety of issues that mess with my self esteem, but that's drat high praise. Thank you.
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May 18, 2016 10:03
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 I'm picturing Fabiyan with something like this  Except they are also on fire 
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LowellDND posted:You really should write more Agreed, please do write more. cat_herder posted:holy poo poo yes please. we've seen how useful Fluors and her proteges have been. Cybercattes with boosted intelligence of all shapes and sizes for various tasks! Sabertooth-sized ones with powerfield-enhanced teeth and claws for warmongering/guards; lynx-sized ones with chameleon-style colourshift and frog-style temperature control, etc
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Hexenritter posted:Cybercattes with boosted intelligence of all shapes and sizes for various tasks! Sabertooth-sized ones with powerfield-enhanced teeth and claws for warmongering/guards; lynx-sized ones with chameleon-style colourshift and frog-style temperature control, etc This will be the Tribes' zoo all over again.
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LowellDND posted:So, we have Demeter, Persephone, Hades, a heroquest and a marriage. Last time we went back and invented new cloning tech, I think? And messed with Space Marine DNA and made learned how to improve our Krieg? If we re-enact the story of Inanna and Dumuzi, we've already had a good start. We've fought the God of Disease, gone to the underworld, lost all our power. All we need to do next is die, and then kill our husband and then be reborn. Perhaps we can tie it in to some incident from the first age of strife. Possible rewards inclue making the quester stronger, gaining a treasure, or learning more about Loki and the first age of strife.
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wiegieman posted:If Loki was Mag'Ladroth the Void Dragon (or any of the other C'Tan) reality would already be warping and breaking under the sheer weight of its existence. Maybe it has been warping. A Chaos god died. But keep in mind Lowell can and probably should change a lot of the facts and back stories on these forces given that he's making it his own. LowellDND posted:Thats the plan, yup. I speculate that the biggest hurdle outside of simply having so much to edit would be communicating the setting. Here, you can say "Space Marine" and a bunch of nerds either know why 10 of them could take over your ship, or they get told by the other nerds. So you're going to be tasked with establishing a whole weird universe while still communicating your story arcs. I don't envy that but am really rooting for you!
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poor life choice posted:Maybe it has been warping. A Chaos god died. But keep in mind Lowell can and probably should change a lot of the facts and back stories on these forces given that he's making it his own. Oh yeah. Arc 1 is going to be a lot of exposition (Bricellus will start as a religious floor scrubber, we'll hear some sermons, etc https://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3657951&pagenumber=86#post441220429) and I'm inventing a whole thing of slang. Random selection: Arditi del Populi: Formal term for Shock Brigades Astaroth: God of secrets, deception, and betrayal Autopistol: Based on the MP5 PDW, the MP7A2, or similar. Katies use the first, Arditi use the second. Autogun: AK-47, AKM, AK-74, AK-12, or variants. Avatar: Hologram of an AI, can be injured via hyperblades Baalmuian: God of disease, decay, and entropy Battle Rifle: Primary weapon of the Katies, based on the G3 TGS Boltgun: Slang; a device for killing cattle. Used exclusively by Commissars for executions via the medulla oblongata. Based on Taurus Judge. Great Schism: When half the Nephilim and the Tagmata rebelled, joining the Great Enemy. The Empress was critically injured here. Giants: Anti-ballistic missile defense. Based on the S-300 Katie/Katies: Slang for kománto thánato. Signature weapon is the Mister. Kománto Thánato: Formal term for Special Forces. See Katie/Katies Madam: Slang for Medium Atomic Demolition Munition. The nuclear warhead of naval ships and mounted on the KEP, forming an MEFP. Based on the W45 Really, this goes on for like 10 pages
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May 18, 2016 12:14
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Tomn posted:I feel like anybody trying to court Team WTF's vote fundamentally doesn't get Team WTF. Having just skimmed the last 100 or so posts (minus lowels posts and a few... Slices of life by other players? What's up with that?), is there any side we could throw in with that would make things more confusing? Its my understanding that we're high on something, trapped in the warp and imagining that the emperor was secretly Horus all along, something something Loki. Something something warp being destroyed Edit: something something kohrne is dead. Something something wedding
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why is team kill the chaos gods with Loki? Sure he made Khornes death possible but at a huge cost to humanity, killing chaos gods isn't just Lokis goal, it's a human objective as well and I think through improving humanity we can kill the rest, kill the chaos gods should be part of the alliance
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LowellDND posted:Really, this goes on for like 10 pages Nice.
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Y'know, come to think of it, even the feudal worlds aren't entirely safe from the collapse. There's basically two issues: First, the culture of the worlds are likely in some way built around the tithe of warriors for the Guard - it's possible the tithe even acts as a form of social engineering, removing the most ambitious and aggressive elements of the population and putting them to work for the Imperium instead of causing trouble for the planet. So when the tithe stops - what happens? When warriors are no longer lifted up to the Clash of the Heavens, or stolen by the Sky Lords, or however they choose to justify the tithe, what happens to the planetary culture? Even worse, though, feudal worlds are likely to have some kind of Imperial observation station floating around somewhere up top to keep an eye on the planet, to root out heresy, keep things from getting too crazy, call for help in the event of xenos invasion, mark out candidates for the tithe, etc. So what happens to the people who man these stations when they realize the Imperium is gone? How many of them are going to look at their advanced technology and wonder why they should waste away in a metal box in space when they could lord it over the locals? And how many of them actually have the talent to match their ambitions? It probably won't end in nuclear hellfire or mass regression the way it would on more advanced worlds, but it's still going to end up being one for the history books.
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Don’t feel like doing a post, so here are some tips for writing in the Prometheus Cycle.quote:The Beast will always have lost corridors, forgotten rooms, ruins of civilizations, and so on. An individual Lord-Sire may map it out briefly, place some semblance of order, but will never last.
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Slice of Life: Brother-Sergeant Octavius Tertius Venatorus. Location: Tantal IV, Realm of Ultramar. Chron: 19/08/M01Y01 Novus Imperium Secundus >>>STANDBY FOR SALUTE REPORT. READY. Thought For The Day: Blessed is the mind too small for doubt. 1: Situation Ongoing assessment of REDACTED integration into communities, ongoing investigation of sedition and dissident activity. CONTACT REPORT Size platoon strength irregular infantry, pre-gunpowder artillery. Activity rudimentary biological warfare, guerilla warfare Location Marnean Foothills, REDACTED integration camp, Gridref 33S LB 86102 11394 Units Insurgent irregulars, covert specialists, artillery Time 02:30 Zulu/14:04 Ultramar, 19th day, Month 8 Equipment bows, crossbows, spears, deadfalls, snares, net traps, spike traps, feces-augmented punji spikes, 3 trebuchets, rotting animal carcasses, insect hives 2:Resolution Following reports of trebuchet-delivered insect hives and carcasses leading to growing sanitation and disease problems at REDACTED integration camp, Fireteams 02 and 03 supported by 24th Cerulean Arrow Musketeer Brigade utilising counterinsurgent forest/jungle doctrine located 3 artillery pieces. Support forces suffered 31 casualties from various traps set by insurgent forces. Flamer use and improvised incendiaries used to encircle insurgent forces. 12 more losses inflicted by insurgent covert specialists before neutralisation. Artillery destroyed using composition 7, antibiotics requested from northern Observation Post Delta. Full personnel/ammunition expenditure attached. Situation remains tenuous. >>>CONFIRM RECEIPT OF SALUTE REPORT >>>CONFIRMED
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Toughy posted:why is team kill the chaos gods with Loki? Sure he made Khornes death possible but at a huge cost to humanity, killing chaos gods isn't just Lokis goal, it's a human objective as well and I think through improving humanity we can kill the rest, kill the chaos gods should be part of the alliance Cause your guys' team includes Anna, sorceress of Tzeentch. And let's be honest, murder the gods and topple their thrones ain't the rallying cry of a careful movement. The Pact is results oriented.
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Not Alex posted:Cause your guys' team includes Anna, sorceress of Tzeentch. Killing Tzeentch and getting Anna's soul back is part of the to do list last i checked, if we can't, we're human pragmatists and we'll be done with her too.
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So, if we kill Horus, would we get Amacita's soul back?
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Nyaa posted:So, if we kill Horus, would we get Amacita's soul back? If you kill the guy who ate your lunch, do you get your sandwich back?
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sullat posted:If you kill the guy who ate your lunch, do you get your sandwich back?
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sullat posted:If you kill the guy who ate your lunch, do you get your sandwich back? He took your lunch, now he's dead and you have lunch. Try not to be too pedantic.
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Could we add a bit to Loki's team where keep Athena around in a weakened state, but otherwise happy or at least whole?
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The Alliance simply has too many objectives, while Team Loki could be said to have no objectives at all, besides "Let's gently caress that sexy robot." Team Murder provides a solid goal to work toward, a goal that is guaranteed to be heard within the Pact, and Team Loki provides support for the only character that has managed to achieve the stated goal. Besides, we only have Athena's word on the whole Loki situation, and remember what happened the last time we took Athena's word at face value? That's right, it turned out it was Loki tricking us this whole time. Therefore, we should trust Loki instead, since we know we can trust that we can't trust them. It's all very simple and logical really.
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paragon1 posted:The Alliance simply has too many objectives, while Team Loki could be said to have no objectives at all, besides "Let's gently caress that sexy robot." Team Murder provides a solid goal to work toward, a goal that is guaranteed to be heard within the Pact, and Team Loki provides support for the only character that has managed to achieve the stated goal. Alliance Objective List Fix the broke stuff Simple  Loki would be proud of your logic in paragraph two, I must admit.
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sniper4625 posted:Alliance Objective List See this is what I'm getting at, everything is broken. Your objectives are a set containing everything i.e. infinity. You'll never get around to murdering the Chaos gods like that. Also thank you!
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But what is consider "broken"? We could count as broken. Our husband could be a broken man. Or rather, what is not broken? Law of physics? Those might already been long broken too! maybe catgirl is the perfection
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Nyaa posted:If it's undigested, yes? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iVgMFY1JFGU Unrelated: https://imgur.com/gallery/Oso5x
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Guys, so many of you loved Athena... I know it's hard to accept that Athena was a transgender Mind in drag, but I think we should try to accept her/his/whatever's choices. Why won't you love LokiThena anymore? 
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Still not the issue. Eh, it's fine for now; problems are just about inevitable but by no means imminent.
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RA Rx posted:Guys, so many of you loved Athena... Because Loki is known for causing trouble and sidestepped is to get enormous power? Because he corrupted our actual goddess, and is probably why all the Abominable Intelligences revoked in the first place?
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Because loki is a jerk who used our position to spy on everything we had access too. (probably). Thats a huge breach of trust. I mean, for a evil overlord, that they didn't even ask means that there's no way we'll ever be an equal, peer, or right hand woman even IF we go all in - because loki simply doesn't respect life beyond thinking of them as tools or pawns. Also, he's such a dick the emperor punched him. When we're talking radical religious overtones, the fact that your glorious I mean, if non-evil Fabiyan stands against something, you KNOW they're just wrong. Its kind of like that. Only, you know, multiplied by a factor of omnissiah and emperor instead of saint. Edit: Cutting or subverting the link between us and loki is probably something that should happen sooner rather than later. The ability to go 'hey, goddess, give me some divine insight and tell me what I'm looking at here' is pretty nifty, but its a lot less so when you become aware there's been a malicious intent behind it the entire time. We should assume that most of the stuff we've done has been passed off to loki, mole style, or at least dig into the cyberware side of things to confirm/verify our suspicions because haha gently caress that's bad.  Anyway! Team Shadowseer is now forming as a thing. Our stance is as follows: Circus herding clowns saving dying races against the horrors the future holds. Ignore me at your own peril, monkeys! We have the fanciest headwear. Come join me instead of hatin! Supplementary mask, because it was a tough call to make. Much like my posting. 
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*Cracks knuckles*. More thoughts on the Mars situation. I find it -highly- suspicious that before everything went to extra-poo poo, the mechanicus were in the middle of opening the vaults of moravec and disemminating new and interesting technologies - into shields up, help down, gently caress you mode as soon as golgotha happened. Thats mighty strange timing. What led to this train of thought: I was thinking about stuff still on the beast, aside from the Pillar, in tandem with 'what if loki really has necron dna'. I was about to say something along the lines of 'man, if loki IS a necron, he'll probably want his dragon body back at some point. Then I thought about it, and what it would be like if I was wrong. I mean, we know the emperor is the only one who beat him. We also know that the emperor chained stuff beneath mars to further humanity's growth. But we don't know the exact details. I mean, yeah. The thing stapled to the beast's bow IS a dragon, possibly even a void dragon. If loki hasn't made moves to get it back, with olympus-tier teleportation resources at his disposal - then it means he doesn't have an interest in recovering it. So if he doesn't want the body back, then it means the really interesting to a mind stuff wasn't the dragon, it was the stuff in the dragon's hoard. Which was just being opened. Which is now stuck on mars. Where we can't see what is being done with it. Getting our rear end to mars just got a big bump up in necessity. I'm going to go ahead and say that mars is going to be Invasion beachhead 2.0 when loki gets sick of pitting pawns and enemies against each other. As a sensible counter to this tactic, we need to run everything we saw/found from the vaults past Real-Thena and Her Posse Of Ourselves to confirm or deny just how dangerous this poo poo it - as real thena is both a mind, and one possessing Defcon -1 level technology skills, this makes her the best equipped to go 'ho gently caress that's super dangerous'. Its also loki's style to position Mind-killer systems right next to Hera, because the Mars Quarantine is a perfectly nice cover to move pieces around for a cuban loki crisis. Worst scenario involves mars being under invasion, fallen already, or the leadership is traitor. If humanity's gonna survive this disaster, we kind of have to preserve that forge world at all costs. Which means moving now.
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LowellDND posted:The Truth Helpful flashbacks!
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TheParadigm posted:
I like your style, throwing in with Team Circus Jerks.
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