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You can even say Bobbin has... untwisted this mess of a story and remade a proper one in its place. quote:No one knows who first discovered the Park Beyond, or how he reached it... However it happened, he became the first contact.
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Jeek posted:You can even say Bobbin has... untwisted this mess of a story and remade a proper one in its place. The discoverer's name and identity have been lost, but the traditions he began live on.
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Chapter 40 – Pirates Part 2 quote:
And now Railrunner’s an “anaconda”. Just write a furry story already, Miranda. It’d make more sense than this anthropomorphic roller-coaster mess you’ve got going on, and a straight-up furry story would appeal to a larger audience as well. quote:
Earlier in the same chapter, when Railrunner was walking through the forest to read his stupid book, “Vines snagged my restraints over and over again. I pulled out the sword and began cutting like an explorer”. And now he’s able to just run up a tree without being hindered by its leaves and branches. quote:
Why are the tree’s branches “summoning strength”? Actually, where do all the trees even come from? Do American amusement parks sell stuffed toy trees at their souvenir shops? And why does Railrunner even bother running after the plane? Why doesn’t he just shoot lightning or fire or concussion beams at it? It can’t be that he’s trying to capture the plane alive – Railrunner has never shown the slightest shred of concern for the preservation of lives, whether humans’ or amusement park rides’. quote:
Railrunner doesn’t have any “friends” to begin with. If you threaten to murder another person, you lose all rights to call that person a “friend”. quote:
What the heck is a “kinkajou tree”? Is it a tree that kinkajous live on? A tree that kinkajous eat? A tree made of kinkajous? A tree that grows kinkajous? quote:
There’s nothing reluctant about Railrunner’s blood-collection and blood-drinking, nor is there any redeeming value in Railrunner as a whole. Against all odds, Miranda Leek keeps making Railrunner more and more villainous; by the end of the book he’ll probably be outright kicking puppies and kittens and clubbing baby seals. quote:
Whatever they do with it can’t possibly be more evil than what Railrunner has done so far. quote:
Tension rising… quote:
And immediately deflated in the very next sentence. What was the point of this segment anyway? In fact, it only makes the earlier chase scene even more ridiculous, since it raises the question of why Railrunner didn’t just lightning bolt the first plane. quote:
64th sigh of the book. quote:
This is stupid. They’ve already revealed their identities in two settlements without the slightest repercussion, and suddenly they are concerned that the “remaining cities” have been claimed by the Fallen? JosephWongKS fucked around with this message at 06:42 on May 31, 2013 |
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Twisted posted:I silently pulled out my sword. I aimed, and then trust [sic] it forward like a tomahawk. Aaaah what the hell you don't thrust with a tomahawk, it's a freaking axe. If you have a sword and are thrusting it, then you are thrusting it like a sword. Swords are generally good for thrusting, on account of most varieties having pointy tips. You swing tomahawks, or even throw them. Railrunner did neither, since the result of this thrust was, well, what you would expect from thrusting a sword. Fake Edit: Amusing that this, of all the crap we've seen, is what actually gets me ranting in the thread. Maybe it's because nobody else commented on it before me, maybe it's because it's 2 in the morning local time, but this failure of weapon knowledge / thesaurus use really bugs me. JosephWongKS posted:[...]by the end of the book he’ll probably be outright kicking puppies and kittens and clubbing baby seals. These various critters will, of course, be in the direct employ of Ironwheel, on his campaign to spread cheer and happiness throughout his realm.
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Oblivion4568238 posted:Aaaah what the hell you don't thrust with a tomahawk, it's a freaking axe. If you have a sword and are thrusting it, then you are thrusting it like a sword. Swords are generally good for thrusting, on account of most varieties having pointy tips. You swing tomahawks, or even throw them. Railrunner did neither, since the result of this thrust was, well, what you would expect from thrusting a sword. He could mean the missile. I mean, Rodney's a grade-A psychopath, he probably knows a lot about weapons. I wouldn't doubt that he could tell the difference.
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JosephWongKS posted:Chapter 40 – Pirates Alright JWKS... it's lost the novelty. You can stop posting fanfiction of Bobbin's original story "The Deadly Ride".
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Oblivion4568238 posted:Aaaah what the hell you don't thrust with a tomahawk, it's a freaking axe. If you have a sword and are thrusting it, then you are thrusting it like a sword. Swords are generally good for thrusting, on account of most varieties having pointy tips. You swing tomahawks, or even throw them. Railrunner did neither, since the result of this thrust was, well, what you would expect from thrusting a sword. I had a big rant typed up about this, too, but I think she actually did use the word "thrust" (or "trust," rather) when she meant "throw." Railrunner has to jump to the other tree to pull the blade out of the plane's corpse, instead of simply...pulling it out. Sure enough, I just went to thesaurus.com and if you search "throw," it will list "thrust" as a synonym. Roget strikes again!
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Iced Cocoa posted:The reluctant and/or redeemable vampire is a common trope. Yeah, except Railrunner is neither reluctant or redeemable. I mean he just killed a being and harvested its blood with no remorse or secondary thoughts. I also meant to point out that I TOTALLY CALLED The Angu Ra to have other MacGuffin powers, and lo it was so. It can grant energy and deflect concussion beams! Maybe it has even more loving powers we don't know about.
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Chapter 40 part 1 posted:Suddenly a petrifying neigh sounded in alarm. KRAMER: Believe me, Jerry. Somewhere in this hospital, the petrifying neigh of Horse-Man cries out for help. JERRY: Well, if I hear a petrifying neigh, I'm outta here.
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SSNeoman posted:Yeah, except Railrunner is neither reluctant or redeemable. I mean he just killed a being and harvested its blood with no remorse or secondary thoughts. While it is a common trope, it is to be expected from Miranda to only use a part of a trope. It's like she is just cargo-culting from popular books and movies without any thought behind it. Sometimes we end up with blatant ripoffs, other times we end up with unintended mix of good guy vampire and werewolf. And im pretty sure that the beam that destroyed tanks and concussion beams is the one and the same power.
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JosephWongKS posted:This is stupid. They’ve already revealed their identities in two settlements without the slightest repercussion, and suddenly they are concerned that the “remaining cities” have been claimed by the Fallen? I guess she finally remembered that the Fallen have supposedly taken over the world and so revealing your identity as the One True Hero isn't always the best idea regardless of how flashily you manage it. Maybe this means there'll be an action scene in which Railrunner has to struggle for a second! Yeah, I know. But hey, I'm an optimist.
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Interlude - In The Line of Firequote:
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It's an amazing, yet sad, feat that one cannot tell if the subject in the interlude is Ironwheel, because ~villain~, or Railrunner, because of precedent. Edit: \/\/ Gah posting times, I don't know if that's actually at me due to having literally just posted. If so, I'm saying that the passage could be about Railrunner in a burning city, bellowing vengeance and all that, and at least as far as JWKS is viewing Railrunner, it could have easily been him that caused the destruction. It's far more likely that Ironwheel is (finally) burning down cities in his path to find Railrunner, but as the story has gone thus far, it could be amusingly "misinterpreted" as about Railrunner. Oblivion4568238 fucked around with this message at 04:50 on Jun 1, 2013 |
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What? Edit: Oh no, I meant that "what" at the chapter. I'm looking at these words but they don't form anything. This is just a meaningless jumble. Kinu Nishimura fucked around with this message at 11:35 on Jun 1, 2013 |
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I think I should mention that as someone who has read this book before, I actually can't pinpoint this particular passage to any point in the book, doesn't matter who is supposed to have blood-stained wheels. I know where it is supposed to be, but there are several things in the passage that contradict that part of the book.
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When Richard Black stepped outside, he understood immediately why Beatrice knew he wouldn't find the portal on his own. The tree house stood in the middle of a massive swamp; bogs and ponds bordered by thin strips of land and plant life spread out as far as Black could see. "We call it Swamp Land," Beatrice added to Rick's thoughts as she leaned against the door frame. "I've heard some claim it is bigger than the Florida Everglades, but no one's managed to chart the whole thing. Only one part of one of these pools is the portal back to Earth. It's how we've kept it safe from Iron Raptor, and it's how I'm going to keep it safe from you." A thought occurred to Black. "What about the other portals?" "All controlled by Raptor's creatures. All rides who come through, whether new discoveries or contacts, must swear allegiance to Iron Raptor or be killed on the spot. You might try one of them, but you'd have to strike a heavy blow against Raptor's forces in the process..." "I get the picture," Black replied. Turning back to his surroundings, he had to admit that "Swamp Land" had a very strange kind of beauty. Rick had visited the Everglades once during a family vacation, and so while the cypress and palm trees looked familiar enough, they competed directly with an odd number of pine and fir trees which would have been more at home in northern climates. In addition, many of the plants looked distinctly off, just a bit too symmetric, a bit too perfect, and a bit too shiny to be natural. Turning back to the tree house, he saw that the massive oak bore the same mark of artificiality, a mark he now realized matched the sheen of plastic he had noticed while inside. Seeing Black's look of amazement, Beatrice smiled and said, "Welcome to the Park Beyond. Everything that is or ever was a part of any amusement park, theme park, carnival, circus, or world, state, or county fair has a place here. What is artificial there is natural here, and what is a prop in your world is real in ours. Would you like to see where your stew came from?" She gestured over to a perfect rectangle of black dirt that stood a few feet away from the tree house where several neat rows of vegetables were growing. Black could identify tomatoes, cabbages, and carrots, but there were at least half a dozen more. Beatrice walked over and pulled a carrot out from the end of the line and handed it to Black. "Try it. You already had some earlier." Rick gave the vegetable a dubious look as he brushed off clods of dirt. To every appearance, the carrot was fake: it was perfect and straight, it had no branching roots, the color was a uniform orange, the skin was smooth and warm in his hand, and the weight matched that of a hollow plastic toy rather than a real plant. Looking closely, he even saw a seam running down its length. Still, Beatrice was feeling more pride than humor, plus he had eaten carrots in the stew, so he gave it a tentative bite near the thick end. Black was utterly shocked when the plastic coating seemed to melt away and his teeth bit into the tough flesh of a real carrot. He pulled the vegetable away as he chewed and admired the cartoonishly straight bite marks his teeth left behind, the plastic appearance extending to the plant's interior. "How--" "Everything in this world that is fake is also real," Beatrice repeated. "Everything that was manufactured or prepared in your world is natural in ours. Have you seen the corntails?" She pointed to a nearby stand of what Black had thought were unusually thick cattails. Coming nearer, however, he realized that the reeds were tipped by what were unmistakably corn dogs. Plucking one from its stem, he tore off the top and saw that, sure enough, a frankfurter was hiding underneath. Curious, Black ate the part he pulled off and found that, although the temperature was lukewarm, the corn dog had been fried to perfection. "You shouldn't eat that," Beatrice warned. Black stopped chewing and looked back at her. "It's high in cholesterol." Rick laughed and finished swallowing. "You sound just like my wife. She always manages to find the one guy selling salads no matter where we go, and she always makes us eat them no matter what we say." Black was about to take another bite of the forbidden food, but then it hit him. His wife wasn't here to stop him, never would be here. Mars probably thought he was dead, and if things went poorly in Park Beyond, she would be right. There was a very good chance that he would never see her again, and all the little gripes he had built up over the past fifteen years seemed to vanish into mist when set against that one solid idea. Rick felt grateful to Special Agent Captain for making him say goodbye to his wife, but at that moment he wanted nothing more than to say hello just one more time. And then there was Sarah. Black had always laughed at the old stereotype of the gun-toting father looming over the young boyfriend, but as his own daughter grew interested in boys her age, he suddenly understood exactly how those fathers felt. It didn't help that Sarah was his one and only, and Rick wasn't ashamed to admit that, after giving up on a second child, he and Mars had spoiled the poor girl rotten. How would she get by without him? Black felt Beatrice's hands on his shoulders. He hadn't cried, but it had been a close thing. "I know this must be hard for you," she said. "You must miss your family terribly. I hate doing this to you, I do, but I must, for all our sakes. Iron Raptor has murdered many families since he took power. Some did not please him enough when they had no more to give, and some he killed simply for the pleasure of their pain. Your family is safe now; ours are not." Beatrice turned Black around to look into her eyes. "I was one of two dozen carousel horses when I first came to Park Beyond. I was always a solitary mare, and I left them to become a contact when they settled into Blancterre, a town many kilometers from here. Iron Raptor visited it a few months ago. No one knows what angered him, but many died before he was satisfied. Out of two dozen horses, there are now only six, including me." Watching the tears stream down Beatrice's face, Black could no longer keep his own in check. "Your family is safe, and mine can never come back. But you can protect those who still live. You must." Beatrice swallowed a sob and forced herself to become calm again. "Find Thunderbolt. Protect us, Richard, like you protect the people of your city. Do this and you can go home." Detective Black took a deep, shuddering breath, wiped his eyes, and nodded. Beatrice gave him directions to the nearest settlement, Cajun Town, but when he asked about provisions, she smiled and said, "I told you already, Park Beyond provides everything we need. This house was already here when I found it. You will see. Go, now, before you run out of light." Shrugging, Black began the long hike. "Good luck! I will pray for your safety!" Beatrice La Blanc called after him. Before long, she was nothing more than a white speck behind a wall of trees, and then she disappeared.
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Bobbin Threadbare posted:
I so hope this includes Triremes from the roman Coliseum, and dragons from the Chinese circus (or would it be just dragon skins in this case?) Also well done on making the "Park Beyond" imaginative.
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Chapter 41 – Judgmentquote:
Guess how long it takes before they throw off the cloak again. quote:
“Red and yellow with patterns all over the fabric.” Miranda Leek has quote:
A world with “technology that is far more advanced than any humans” still uses bricks for roads. quote:
What kind of “old English towns” look like Transylvania? Does the Tennessee Board of Eduation use a different of atlases from the rest of the world? quote:
Note the “Here we were to be extremely cautious”. quote:
What kind of amusement park ride is a “tin lizzy”? The top 5 results from Google were Tin Lizzy’s Cantina, the Irish rock band Thin Lizzy, the Ford Model T (colloquially known as the “Tin Lizzy”), TinLizzie18 Longarm Quilting Machines and Systems, and a Yelp review of Tin Lizzy’s Cantina. quote:
A few paragraphs ago, in the very same chapter: “It was hard to distinguish the smell of the good from the bad. Here we were to be extremely cautious.” quote:
What kind of name is that an amusement park ride? Even “Freakshow” sounds better than that. quote:
Let me repeat. A few paragraphs ago, in the very same chapter: “It was hard to distinguish the smell of the good from the bad. Here we were to be extremely cautious.” quote:
In normal story, such an accidental exposure would result in trouble for the protagonist. Unfortunately, this is not a normal story. quote:
65th sigh of the book. quote:
By now I’m not even questioning the convenience coincidence of a random clothing store owner being in possession of a McGuffin. It’s just part and parcel of one’s expectation for this travesty of a story. quote:
It doesn’t sound intimidating, it just sounds stupid. quote:
Why are they still surprised? They already knew this was a Fallen-controlled town. quote:
How do roller coasters and go carts even put on “armor like a knights”? quote:
Very heroic of Railrunner, dragging the civilians into the fight, especially where the fight was caused in the first place by the hero’s presence. That is what heroes do, right? quote:
“Freakshow and I fell to the earth.” * nothing of consequence happens * “Freakshow and I got up.” quote:
These are roller coasters and other amusement park rides, so why do they all behave in such animalistic ways? Should they act more like, you know, machines? quote:
Why doesn’t Railrunner just bend her blood? Not once has he used blood-bending ever since he tortured the mouse and inflicted a minor injury on Detective Black. That’s what happens when you give a character an overwhelming power– if that character doesn’t use that power, your readers or audience will always ask why. At least Katara of Avatar: The Last Airbender could only use her blood-bending during the full moon; Railrunner doesn’t have any restrictions or conditions on its use, apart from “Miranda forgot about that power”. quote:
One sentence it was “gladiators”, next sentence it’s “knights”. Make up your mind, Miranda Leek. I noticed she loves to say that her characters “X like Y”, without actually describing or explaining how their X-ing resembles Y. quote:
Which part of the thesaurus did Miranda Leek get “prominent” from? quote:
“Swung my cars”. “Enclosed both sets of wheels around her neck.” “Drove one of her claws into one of my seats.” Roller coaster anatomy makes every fight scene utterly quote:
Fixed a typo for Miranda Leek. JosephWongKS fucked around with this message at 09:17 on Jun 4, 2013 |
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JosephWongKS posted:“Red and yellow with patterns all over the fabric.” Miranda Leek has quote:“Static doesn’t stand out, he looks more ordinary than we do.” quote:What kind of amusement park ride is a “tin lizzy”? The top 5 results from Google were Tin Lizzy’s Cantina, the Irish rock band Thin Lizzy, the Ford Model T (colloquially known as the “Tin Lizzy”), TinLizzie18 Longarm Quilting Machines and Systems, and a Yelp review of Tin Lizzy’s Cantina. quote:Which part of the thesaurus did Miranda Leek get “prominent” from?
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quote:Then I saw, a magic laser gun lying in the dirt. I picked it up and shot all of the bad guys, killing them. How am I doing?
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Dreggon posted:How am I doing? 6/10, you didn't spend enough time wrestling with a thesaurus. Also, Merrylegs seems to be criticising Railrunner's actions, she needs some death threats to remind her that she can't go around having opinions on things.
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quote:“Come with me young coaster. I shall show you my wares. By the way, I am Ashsoot.” quote:Then Freakshow appeared in the middle of them. She wore only a smirk quote:It looked like she was worse, staggering toward me like a drunk and looking pale. She was sweating and was also dark under the eyes. quote:I heard voices, but to whom did they belong to? I couldn’t make out the words; they sounded gibberish, like extreme mumbling. Then everything went crashing into eternal blackness. 'to whom did they belong to' Dreggon posted:How am I doing? attackbunny fucked around with this message at 16:55 on Jun 2, 2013 |
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Chapter 42 - The Packquote:
A world with “technology that is far more advanced than any humans” has exactly the same type of medical apparatus as the “real world”. Also, and again, stone buildings. quote:
From the reference to “venom count”, it appears that Miranda Leek is an avid player of Magic: The Gathering and/or Yu-Gi-Oh. quote:
“Then she turned [to do something for which turning should not have been necessary, since that her ‘records’ appears to be a piece of paper on a clipboard]. Then she turned again.” quote:
“The legendary coaster had convinced her that the rumors that the red had returned were true” implies that there is another “legendary coaster” other than Railrunner. One shudders at the thought of two Railrunners in the world. quote:
Dumb though they may be, I get the logic behind most of the roller coaster names in this book, apart from Moonblood (because seriously, Moonblood?) but how is “Chainlink” even related to roller coasters? quote:
Until proven otherwise, I’ll assume that Razorblade is a roller coaster built for the use and entertainment of maritime military forces, and not a roller coaster painted a shade of blue. quote:
“Please, two strangers whom we’ve never met before and who could be spies or agents of Ironwheel, please feel free to come into close proximity to our valuable secret weapon and figurehead of the rebel movement, who now lies unconscious and vulnerable to assassination and/or other sabotage.” quote:
66th sigh of the book. quote:
“The patient was already unconscious, so I put him under ‘a lot of anesthetic’. I don’t know what will happen if I removed the anesthetic, but I took it off him anyway to see what will happen. I’m a good doctor!” quote:
This is the first, and last, reference to the “pole” in this chapter. quote:
Didn’t she just say that “I took it off him to see what will happen”? How does she now know that he’ll be “all right”? quote:
Isn’t “hibernation” by definition carried out in silence? quote:
These morons have absolutely the worst internal security and counter-intelligence procedures. The worst. quote:
A world with “technology that is far more advanced than any humans”, where the weapons of choice are… swords, maces and axes, which are most decidedly not “on blueprints” in the “real world”. Also, said “advanced” world manufactures said swords, maces and axes individually by manual labour and not by mass production using robots or machines. quote:
If wolves were as “smart” as you guys, they would have gone extinct a long, long time ago. quote:
Torches. This is the apex of their “advanced technology”. Torches. Torches. quote:
They don’t live “in” the tomb, they live in the complex surrounding the tomb. Railrunner’s stupidity has thoroughly infected his companions. quote:
67th sigh of the book. quote:
I can only say that these people fully deserve the “leader” they seek.
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The picture for this chapter:quote:I think the Chainlink name is a reference to the Chain Hill in roller coasters, the first hill in a roller coaster. That's the only thing I can really think of. But given how nonsensical the rest of the names are, such as Razorblade of all things, I can't really give any real assertion of how Miranda thinks things through. And now Railrunner got an army of roller coasters.
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Iced Cocoa posted:The picture for this chapter: bahahahaha e: just look at it holy gently caress e2: ok ok no seriously think about it a human is supposed to fit into one of those seats so imagine how big the bed + equipment must be, then think about how big that equipment needs to be (i.e. a tenth the size) then look at the horse and
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Dreggon posted:bahahahaha
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Plus the horse looks utterly off-perspective compared to everything else.
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Look at that bed. Look at the desk. That bed is too short to accommodate the sheer length of Railrunner. Look at that book as well. "Roller Coaster" And of course there is also a hanzo steel katana on the bookshelf.
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Hey, people with vivid imaginations (unlike Leek)! Imagine what it would feel like to rest on your back when your back is a 30-foot-long series of hollow boxes filled with leather seats and your many arms and legs are jutting straight up into the air or draped over your cold metal body. I would like to take a moment to compare Twisted to Nemo Ramjet and company's dinosaurids project. Look at the images, read the authors' comments, look at how hard they work trying to come up with a society and technology that fit the dromesaurid as a dromesaurid, not as a human with knifetoes. It's freaking amazing. She really should just make roller coasters into standard-issue furry-style humanoids if she's going to write like they are. I mean, she just keeps ignoring those rear 3/4ths instead of integrating them into fights or body language or-- Oh Jesus Christ Thunderbark is just sitting in an easy chair in that picture isn't he. She literally just ignored the rear 3/4ths of him. And I swear that writing is Covenant/Forerunner script from Halo.
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# ? Jun 3, 2013 16:00 |
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Freud would have a field day with all these female characters grabbing poles of some sort Okay no really. You have a rebel force with medical equipment camping out inside a tomb. How big is that loving tomb? If it is so big, then how was lost? Were there aggressive dust cyclones in the area? And really Miranda. Just explain all medical equipment with "nanomachines". I am loving serious. If you have no imagination, then having such a dismissive explanation of medical technology is totally acceptable.
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# ? Jun 3, 2013 21:32 |
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SSNeoman posted:Freud would have a field day with all these female characters grabbing poles of some sort Nanotorches Nanostone Nanoblades Yep, that simple prefix basically helps fix the insane anachronisms.
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Cuntpunch posted:Nanotorches It actually does. I mean it's still bad, but when you look at it in context of the source material, it's a definite improvement.
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quote:“Some of our members believe they found who was accompanying him. I’m going to let them enter, to see if they can recognize him.”
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attackbunny posted:"We'll let these guys take a look at the only red roller coaster train in existence and see if they go 'oh yeah, that's the red roller coaster train!'" Maybe these merry outlaws are all colorblind, ok. It's the sort of deep character backgrounds Miranda builds into her stories.
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# ? Jun 4, 2013 00:33 |
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Cuntpunch posted:Maybe these merry outlaws are all colorblind, ok. It's the sort of deep character backgrounds Miranda builds into her stories. But all roller coasters have "the sight of a dragon". Thunderbark said so in Chapter 7.
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# ? Jun 4, 2013 01:27 |
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JosephWongKS posted:But all roller coasters have "the sight of a dragon". Thunderbark said so in Chapter 7. ...unreliable
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# ? Jun 4, 2013 02:04 |
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Cuntpunch posted:...unreliable She was already unreliable when Railrunner was unable to see in the dark upon his first entry to that ancient temple.
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# ? Jun 4, 2013 04:48 |
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Cuntpunch posted:...unreliable It's not unreliable. It turns out dragons have really lovely vision.
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Chapter 43 – Arisequote:
Isn’t Railrunner supposed to have thoroughly embraced his roller-coaster-ness? Why then is he still bound by human concepts of “heaven”? A roller coaster heaven wouldn’t have winged angels, but would have e.g. roller coaster tracks stretching into the horizons. quote:
First time I’ve ever heard of the concept of Purgatory being described as “an air lock between the real and unreal”. quote:
I was going to mock Miranda Leek for comparing “weightlessness” to ”airtime”, but then I Googled further and discovered that there actually is a term called “air-time” which means “the feeling of weightlessness or negative gravity force experienced on a roller coaster or other amusement rides”. quote:
If you already realized that you could “see nothing but blackness”, not because you were blind or because you were in a lightless room, but because your own “eyes were closed”, why even bother mentioning it? quote:
Another fine example of the “I rolled onto my side… I rolled onto my back” school of writing. quote:
68th sigh of the book. quote:
It seriously took him this long to realize that he “had IV’s in several arms”? quote:
The rear end in a top hat is just congenitally incapable of being civil, isn’t he? quote:
69th sigh of the book. quote:
Flashback I saw him start to tremble again. Trembling in anger, so ready to kill me. I waited for the roller coaster’s teeth to rip out my throat. I still wasn’t finished speaking my mind, so I continued. Now “He can be cranky,” said Merrylegs, master of understatement and victim of Stockholm syndrome. quote:
“But not sorry for threatening to kill Merrylegs and Static.” quote:
Static wasn’t in the room when Railrunner regained consciousness, and this world of “advanced technology” doesn’t seem to have any telephones or other telecommunications devices. How could Static possibly know that Railrunner was awake? quote:
Railrunner, brilliant orator, noted for his “witty and smart facts”. quote:
Don’t be so humble, Railrunner. You are indeed a very “special” roller coaster. quote:
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During the week they spent waiting for the moron to wake up, hasn’t Razorblade spoken with Static and Merrylegs about their experiences with Railrunner in the real world and Amusement Park Between? How could he possibly still trust Railrunner to provide any kind of leadership at all? JosephWongKS fucked around with this message at 10:15 on Jun 4, 2013 |
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The whole thing about air-time is also absurd when considering the fact that Railrunner has never experienced it. He has never been on a roller coaster in his life as Rodney since that would have just changed him into Railrunner, and Railrunner can't experience air-time because he's a roller coaster train and only the passengers can experience it.
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