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Fuubi
Jan 18, 2015

THUNDERDOME LOSER

:toxx:

In Asia before

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Obliterati
Nov 13, 2012

Pain is inevitable.
Suffering is optional.
Thunderdome is forever.


In. Asia, before

BabyRyoga
May 21, 2001

THUNDERDOME LOSER 2021


uh, in

Asia, after

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


ThirdEmperor posted:

Murica! Before 1900.

Caroline Affair

Nethilia posted:

In.

Africa. Before 1900.

Musa I's Pilgrimage to Mecca


Sham bam bamina! posted:

Antarctica, after.

Operation Highjump


flerp posted:

asia before

Taiping Rebellion

Thranguy posted:

in
Europe before.

Fall of Constantinople

Fumblemouse posted:

In
Europe after

Occupation of the Channel Islands

Antivehicular posted:

In.
I'll take South America, after 1900

1951 Argentinian Presidential Election


crabrock posted:

in but i can't decide so decide for me plz

October Revolution


Fuubi posted:

:toxx:

In Asia before

Meiji Restoration


Obliterati posted:

In. Asia, before

Siege of Baghdad


BabyRyoga posted:

uh, in

Asia, after

1953 Iranian coup d'état

J.A.B.C.
Jul 2, 2007

There's no need to rush to be an adult.




IN.

Europe, after 1900.

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


J.A.B.C. posted:

IN.

Europe, after 1900.

Reunification of Germany

Deltasquid
Apr 10, 2013

awww...
you guys made me ink!


THUNDERDOME


In! Asia, before!

Do you do flash rules? 'Cause I'm hungry for a flash rule!

sparksbloom
Apr 30, 2006


sparksbloom posted:

In. Oceania, after.

apophenium
Apr 13, 2009


In, Asia, After 1900 please!

Natty Ninefingers
Feb 17, 2011


South America, after.

Uranium Phoenix
Jun 20, 2007


RADIOACTIVE DUST SURGE DETECTED


Uranium Phoenix posted:

In. Americas, before.

Plz I need a prompt so bad

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P



My bad!

The Disappearance of Harold Holt

apophenium posted:

In, Asia, After 1900 please!

Fall/Liberation of Saigon

Deltasquid posted:

In! Asia, before!

Do you do flash rules? 'Cause I'm hungry for a flash rule!

First Crusade

Genre Requirement: Romance

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


Uranium Phoenix posted:

Plz I need a prompt so bad

Pastry War

Tyrannosaurus
Apr 12, 2006


Europe and, honestly, either. Whatever you think will be more fun for me to write and you to read.

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


Tyrannosaurus posted:

Europe and, honestly, either. Whatever you think will be more fun for me to write and you to read.

Cadaver Synod

Simbyotic
Aug 24, 2010

THUNDERDOME LOSER


In

Europe, before

Exmond
May 31, 2007

Writing is fun!

Remember that I, Exmond, middling writer extraordinare, am a worse writer than you!



Djeser

All Hail Grubscratch



What Worked:

Pretty much everything worked. The start is funny and we quickly get to the real "Deal" of the story quickly. You explain why the people follow them.

Things I disliked:

The ending with the bit about thumb wrestling. It comes out of nowhere. The reveal of the knights gender is also a hit or miss thing.



Prompt: Nails it, I laughed

Overall: A great story!



Fumble Mouse:

Bring on the Lovers, Liars and Clowns



What Worked:

Your idea is pretty funny and the story flows pretty well, save for a few scenes.

Things I disliked:

All of the sudden "action" scenes are ill-timed and with very little explanation. They also serve to villianize King Arthur, who I think we are supposed to be sympathetic to?

Political commentary is an odd thing. The joke lands but I also had to go "gently caress"

None of your jokes land. I get that Jamison is supposed to be the joke delivery system (As well as King Arthur), but I think tweaking your dialogue would of made some of hte jokes land better. An example is when King Arthur is introduced to the Prime Minister. There was a chance for a good joke there but it comes to late (Before he kills police officers, hah- that isn't funny.)



Prompt: It explores a funny idea but fails to land any jokes. The suddden action also ruins the tone of the piece

Overall: Good idea, tries for some jokes and then beheads people. Needs to spend some more time chilling out.





Chairchucker

Transcript of Breakfast Show, 12 January 2005, 0503 -- 0550'

FLASH RULE: Material Issue's "International Pop Overthrow"

After your Elvis story I had high expectations, I think that affected the crit, sorry!



What Worked:

The ending joke is funny. The dog character and what you do with it was also neat.

Things I disliked:

Your format plus the "Conflict" of the story do not mix. First off, we learn about the mystery near the tail end of the start, meaning I have to go through 4 paragraphs of boring dialogue. Then once they mystery is established you... waffle on phone calls and trying to land some not good jokes.

Your ending is literally "Then the thing stopped and we won't explain anything". Again I think your format got in the way of actually having a story.



Prompt: None of the jokes landed. There were many attempts at jokes.

Overall: A transcript of a boring news event.



BabyRyoga

Moscow Misunderstanding

FLASH RULE: Sally Cinnamon

You "hid" your grammar errors and spelling errors in dialogue so you get away with it.



What Worked:

Someone had to explain your ending "Aunty Freeze" and that is a GROAN worthy bad joke sir. I think if you had tightened it up and foreshadowed it (The aunt's name is Kendra, and she never mentions shes freezing) you would have nailed it and earned the ire of every judge out there. Hats off to your bad joke sir!

Things I disliked:

Your whole story is boring, I'm sorry to say. The start is about a protagonist who is on the train, the train stops, he thinks about his aunt, grabs his INVENTORY LIST (Which is meaningless) and then goes for a walk. By the fourth paragraph we FINALLY, FINALLY get some kind of mystery but it is ruined by the incredibly PASSIVE protagonist (I climbed onto the car without resistance or panic). Then we get to the joke and it doesn't land. AntiFreeze doesn't help wtih cooling an engine down. it prevents the water running through the radiator from freezing and is needed in chilly temperatures. You didn't mention that so the reader is left confused (Also why did they think he made Aunty Freeze?)

Things that I got angry reading

I was travelling with my Aunt Kendra, whom did things. who

She won't mind if I leave for an bit. a bit



Prompt: It tries wtih a really bad joke that's so bad it's good.

Overall: A very long, boring wind up to one joke. The batter swings, twists his hips, nails himself in the head, and then falls while muttering about Anti-Freeze.





SebMojo

Piss



What Worked:

I didn't dislike the story, its competent and has compelling characters. It's a bit tough to read the dialogue and get through the slang/lingo, but the characters presented are characters.

Things I disliked:

Your dialogue, but that's because Im an old man who doesn't understand your millenial lingo and now i'm confused and slightly scared.

The distinct lack of jokes throughout the piece. I have a feeling this is a giant setup for a joke...

Oh no, a massive lead up to a piss joke.



Prompt: N..no.

Overall: A competent story that spends 800 words to lead up to a piss joke.

Deltasquid
Apr 10, 2013

awww...
you guys made me ink!


THUNDERDOME


Exmond posted:


SebMojo

Overall: A competent story that spends 800 words to lead up to a piss joke.

Again. :v:

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010


Legit Cyberpunk








:angel:

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010


Legit Cyberpunk








actually, fuckit: fight me you Belgian noncewaffle

Deltasquid
Apr 10, 2013

awww...
you guys made me ink!


THUNDERDOME


Oh hell yes. Prepare for the second loss in your career, old man.

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


Simbyotic posted:

In

Europe, before

Second Defenestration of Prague

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


Natty Ninefingers posted:

South America, after.

Fall of Pedro II of Brazil

flerp
Feb 25, 2014

I DON'T ALWAYS
HERDY DUR MUR FLERP FLERPITY
FLOOPIN
BUT WHEN I DO
I YER DER FLERPITY
THURN DER DERMIN
BORK! BORK! BORK!




deltamojo brawl

starts with a piss joke, ends with a dead belgian

800 words

due 11/25 11:59 pm pst

toxx up boys

Deltasquid
Apr 10, 2013

awww...
you guys made me ink!


THUNDERDOME


:toxx:

crabrock
Aug 2, 2002


Deltasquid posted:

Oh hell yes. Prepare for the second loss in your career, old man.

actually sebmojo has 13 brawl defeats https://thunderdome.cc/?author=sebmojo
/

Deltasquid
Apr 10, 2013

awww...
you guys made me ink!


THUNDERDOME


crabrock posted:

actually sebmojo has 13 brawl defeats https://thunderdome.cc/?author=sebmojo
/


I will spend the next 10 days studying the blade... While you party, I will analyze your weaknesses... While you think of piss jokes, I will hone my prose....

Omae wa mou shindeiru, Sebmojo-san

Ironic Twist
Aug 3, 2008

I'm bokeh, you're bokeh


in, Africa, after.

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


Ironic Twist posted:

in, Africa, after.

Battle of Algiers

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010


Legit Cyberpunk







Deltasquid posted:

Omae wa mou shindeiru, Sebmojo-san

Everyone
Like the fallen leaves
Is already dead

:toxx:

sebmojo fucked around with this message at 11:57 on Nov 15, 2017

Kaishai
Nov 3, 2010

Scoffing at modernity.

:siren: Thunderdome Recap! :siren:



Writing is a lot like rage: it's all a feeling,
And it fills our hearts from the floor to the ceiling.
We see disasters all around us;
Stop and take a read, and drown in disgust.
Plots so broken that they hurt.
loving commas, how do they work?
And we don't wanna talk to the failure list.
Y'all mofos are shameful and getting us pissed.
Child abuse and popcorn weather--
At least recappers suffer together.


It's a cheery day at the abusement park, and Sitting Here, Ironic Twist, and I are on a mission to ride all the roller coasters of Week 272: Lost in the funhouse! Well, maybe not all of them. We don't like lines--they give our fair food too long to settle--so we skip the popular rides and head straight to the creaking deathtraps that sensible people avoid. Wheee, a shooting gallery full of paper-thin targets! Dibs on the centaur carousel! It all ends in vomit and tears, alas, when we read Sham bam bamina!'s "Behind the Paint."

He barfed, and nobody cared.


Episodes past can be found here!

Kaishai fucked around with this message at 00:49 on Nov 15, 2017

Yoruichi
Sep 21, 2017


Horse Facts

True and Interesting Facts about Horse




Kaishai posted:

:siren: Thunderdome Recap! :siren:

It all ends in vomit and tears, alas, when we read [b]Sham bam bamina!'s [url=http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?story=6068]"Behind the Paint."

Looking forward to listening to this is getting me through my lovely afternoon of pointless administrivia at work 😁

TheGreekOwl
Mar 1, 2014

THUNDERDOME LOSER


Urgh, I honestly can't choose here. I guess I'll go with what I know

Europe, Post 1900

Chairchucker
Nov 14, 2006

The man was stunningly well dressed. He had a smart looking jacket, and a really neat looking cape, the lining of which was shimmering and sparkling in more than Oriental splendour, which is a great deal of splendour indeed, just ask Kipling.



Exmond posted:

Remember that I, Exmond, middling writer extraordinare, am a worse writer than you!



Actually you are good, because writing crits is good. Thank you.

QuoProQuid
Jan 12, 2012

Tr*ckin' and F*ckin' all the way to tha
T O P


TheGreekOwl posted:

Urgh, I honestly can't choose here. I guess I'll go with what I know

Europe, Post 1900

23-F

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010


Legit Cyberpunk







i'll help judge this

ask for flash rules with a :toxx:

Jay W. Friks
Oct 4, 2016


Got Out.

Grimey Drawer

If you need another Judge, I'll throw my banana pickers hat in as well.

Sham bam bamina!
Nov 6, 2012

ƨtupid cat


Thank you for doing justice to my masterpiece.

GenJoe
Sep 14, 2010


hi I am in with North America/before and will also :toxx: more because I am a horrible flake but I will take a flash rule too I guess

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Flesnolk
Apr 11, 2012

h

Oceania, after.

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