In, sleep, sebmojo .
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# ? Nov 12, 2019 18:14 |
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# ? Dec 12, 2024 18:11 |
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in peace (no hellrule plz)
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# ? Nov 12, 2019 19:51 |
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In, sanctuary
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# ? Nov 12, 2019 21:48 |
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in connection give me a good one, seb
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# ? Nov 12, 2019 22:35 |
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SlipUp posted:in Everyone is drowning on dry land Anomalous Amalgam posted:In kitchen appliances are watching everything, what do they know Djeser posted:in wildlife hellrule me sebby the ground will no longer hold us up Saucy_Rodent posted:Oh, hellrule please story is told in breaths Black Griffon posted:In, sleep, sebmojo . protag is quivering into oblivion flerp posted:in peace there are no personalities in your story but we still care what happens (nb you don't have to do this i did not read your words properly, you can if u want tho) Antivehicular posted:In, sanctuary protag doesn't believe they exist story takes place in the barrel of a gun crimea posted:in connection all of your characters actions are meaningless sebmojo fucked around with this message at 00:07 on Nov 13, 2019 |
# ? Nov 12, 2019 22:59 |
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In My cat. Hellrule me! (Imagine the toxx emoji here)
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 00:38 |
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Carl Killer Miller posted:
curlingiron posted:In
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 01:02 |
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gently caress. Uh, my item is YOUR cat
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 01:26 |
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In. Ley lines.
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 01:40 |
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Carl Killer Miller posted:In you can both write about my cat but i will be watching closely to determine who loves kitties more
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 02:07 |
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Sitting Here posted:you can both write about my cat but i will be watching closely to determine who loves kitties more Awesome. I'll take my toxx rule then, Seb
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 02:25 |
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In, August.
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 02:45 |
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HEY GUYS I JUST NOTICED THERE IS A POEM DOME https://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3903748 If you do poetry, be a pal and go over there and help this babby dome grow
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 08:21 |
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Or even if you don’t do poetry, come join anyway! Also I’ll jump in on this one. Coffee
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 08:38 |
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sephiRoth IRA posted:Or even if you don’t do poetry, come join anyway!
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 08:58 |
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In Privacy
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 17:47 |
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I forget, is going over the limit a bit acceptable? Like fewer than 70 words?
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 18:49 |
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Try it and see
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 19:05 |
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sephiRoth IRA posted:I forget, is going over the limit a bit acceptable? Like fewer than 70 words? You might get away with it if the judges don't notice.
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 19:26 |
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Djeser posted:You might get away with it if the judges don't notice. Welp, poo poo.
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 19:40 |
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Carl Killer Miller posted:Awesome. I'll take my toxx rule then, Seb since FLORP has disdained it, you may have: there are no personalities in your story but we still care what happens
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# ? Nov 13, 2019 20:32 |
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in my heart
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 06:01 |
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IN thing that matters: noise
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 18:53 |
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sebmojo posted:since FLORP has disdained it, you may have: Wheres my hellrule mother fucker
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 21:16 |
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Entenzahn posted:Wheres my hellrule mother fucker should have asked for one then
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 21:29 |
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Djeser posted:should have asked for one then But I toxxed, "Djeser"
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 22:00 |
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ENTS RULE everyone can't stop fighting, not even for a moment
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 22:08 |
Ents do rule
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# ? Nov 14, 2019 22:09 |
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In, The Moon,
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 04:00 |
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been too long it's always been too long in, song
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 07:24 |
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sparksbloom posted:In, The Moon, No words longer than three syllables
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 12:07 |
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Although I have a brawl pending judgment, any of you other cowards feel like getting cut with poorly used words? Preferably B or C rank contestants. An S-Class will just make a mess of me, but I'm no coward and will demolish anyone who is fool enough to come at me, or die trying.
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 22:56 |
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Anomalous Amalgam posted:Although I have a brawl pending judgment, any of you other cowards feel like getting cut with poorly used words? I'll prompt and judge this, if there's a challenger
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 23:09 |
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In, memories.
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 23:28 |
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Anomalous Amalgam posted:Although I have a brawl pending judgment, any of you other cowards feel like getting cut with poorly used words? Let's dance.
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# ? Nov 15, 2019 23:50 |
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steeltoedsneakers posted:Let's dance. Okay! Sneakers, Amalgam, this is your brawl prompt: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_NSJbEeNSe0 1500 words, due Tuesday, Nov 26th at 2359 Pacific time. Toxxes, please.
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# ? Nov 16, 2019 00:41 |
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Antivehicular posted:Okay! Sneakers, Amalgam, this is your brawl prompt: Someone start chiseling Sneakers a tombstone.
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# ? Nov 16, 2019 01:23 |
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Antivehicular posted:Okay! Sneakers, Amalgam, this is your brawl prompt:
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# ? Nov 16, 2019 01:33 |
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Bumping This! Sign-ups are closing on Monday sometime! We've got some folks in, but not as many as years past. Let's make this poo poo merry, you scrooges. Chili posted:
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# ? Nov 16, 2019 02:35 |
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anomalous slipup brawl both of these are, well, i wouldnt say suck, but generally are just kinda eh anomalous the story is mostly a summary of things happening. there's not much going on, but it's short, so maybe that's excusable. but there's just nothing really there. there are just kinda events happening but like i have no reason to care who any of these characters are and there really isnt anything happening. there's some vagueness with why theyre being ignored or mistreated or what have you, but it never culminates into anything meaningful or scary or interesting. its just kinda like eh here's some things happening that are kinda sad kinda scary and then ur off on ur way. it fails to really elicit any emotions since the narration feels detached from the characters. it feels sort-of like reading a wikipedia article, where it can be vaguely interesting, but all of the emotion and human elements of it are hidden. slipup this feels mostly like a character study except the character being studied is dull and cliche. like, he's just a rugged oldboy whose wife died and wants to rough it out in the wilds. it's not very clear on the setting, and im not sure if this is supposed to be like some apocalypse scenario (i dont think so) or some supernatural thing (i hope not given the prompt) or if it's just normal contemporary life and the guy just wants to die in the woods. but the main fault is that, the character is just not very interesting. he doesnt feel any real complicated emotions, he doesnt feel like he has any advanced depth or backstory. he has a dead wife which is like wow isnt that obvious and his relationship with her isnt expanded on, his relationship with the outside world isnt explained, and his reasoning for wanting to go into a cabin to be murdered by a bear not hit on in any meaningful way. also oh my god your tenses SlipUp posted:The snow melts slowly day by day present tense . I sit with my propane lamp and stare out the window, wondering if this year is the year present. Every year there's a little less of the wilds each time present tense. Nature is poked and prodded, herded into an ever smaller corner present. An animal is most dangerous there present. you have to decide what tense you want to use and stick with it. and for the love of god dont tense shift in the middle of a paragraph jfc results im not happy with either of these but i flipped a coin and then ignored it and instead say that slipup wins because while these are both sketches of stories, slipup's lines were a bit more clear
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