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Dicere
Oct 31, 2005
Non plaudite modo pecuniam jacite.

Fwiw, I am unbothered by the losertar or any of the other less-than-fluffy aspects of TD. Maybe downgrade to a snarky red text if you think it would help?

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Chernobyl Princess
Jul 31, 2009

It has long been an axiom of mine that the little things are infinitely the most important.

:siren:thunderdome winner:siren:

I've always been of the opinion that avatars are a good advertisement, but gangtags and av text would work the same way and not change up how anyone is presenting themselves around the forum.

What got me into Thunderdome was a week where the winner had an opportunity to get published. My story was bad and I felt bad, but the honest critique was genuinely so helpful. I think it's better with less kayfabe as well.

...it's also better when all judges post their crits in a timely fashion so this is me toxxing to get my outstanding crits done by the end of the week.

Fuschia tude
Dec 26, 2004

THUNDERDOME LOSER 2019

Sitting Here posted:

Would you sign up more if the losertar was optional?

nah


Chernobyl Princess posted:

I've always been of the opinion that avatars are a good advertisement, but gangtags and av text would work the same way and not change up how anyone is presenting themselves around the forum.

Gangtang would be cool as an alternative if it was still a hyperlink to this thread.

RandomPauI
Nov 24, 2006


Grimey Drawer
I'd like to avoid a losertaur and would enjoy a hangtag for successfully submitting.

sephiRoth IRA
Jun 13, 2007

"Science is not only compatible with spirituality; it is a profound source of spirituality."

-Carl Sagan
Rationally, I love this thread and engaging my creativity, and I lurk the gently caress out all the time. But I have trouble with criticism, despite knowing the only way to get good is to do it again and again.

I don't mind the kayfabe, but my brain chemistry has real problems with a constant reminder I was poo poo one week and so I don't sign up. I know I shouldn't care, but I don't want to spend 5 bucks a week figuring out how to get good at writing / plot / dialogue / adjusting my thinking so a losertar wouldn't bother me.

So I'll continue to lurk and, like others, maybe enter when I know I have a lot of time to write and hone something. Thanks to all the contributors, I enjoy reading your stuff!

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.
Thunderdome Week DLXVI: Actually, We Sort of Do Need More Heroes


The blood is getting mighty thin around here, to the point where last week might have been mistaken for a brawl. While the thunderdome cabal works on long term strategies, let's go back to basics and try and bring in new blood.

So, this week, I want to see some (many) Post-apocalyptic Vignettes.

You can use any kind of apocalypse, realistic or fantastic or absurdist or historical, whatever.

Wikipedia posted:

A vignette (/vɪnˈjɛt/ m, also /viːnˈ-/) is a French loanword expressing a short and descriptive piece of writing that captures a brief period in time. Vignettes are more focused on vivid imagery and meaning rather than plot.


500 words. But there are multiple ways to earn a single 200 word bounty:


  • If this is your first or second time writing for the Thunderdome
  • If you haven't entered for more than a year 
  • If you recruit a new entrant.

Flash rules are available with no wordcount change involved. They will be in the form of songs from our dearly missed Auntie Entity and Acid Queen, AKA Tina Turner.

For any new domers, flash rules are sources of additional inspiration. For many people, restrictions breed creativity. With song flash rules the best approach is to grab a few images, phrases, or general vibes from the song and/or video and mix them in to your work. The worst approach is to rewrite the story of the song. In this case, the flash is there to inspire you; judges will not hold it against you if they don't see the connection.

As usual, we do not want fanfiction, erotica, or contemporary political screeds. Stories should be posted in the thread (rather than linking to a gdoc or other external site) and should not be edited after posting. We usually put the wordcount and any flash rules just under the title, but if you forget, see above: don't edit the post. Put those in a new one.

The deadline to sign in is 11:59 PM Friday. (Pacific Time)

The deadline to post stories is 11:59 PM Sunday. (Also Pacific Time)

Judges:

Thranguy
PhantomMuzzles
Fumblemouse

Heroes:
curlingiron
RandomPauI
rohan (Afterglow)
Beezus
Djeser
Albatrossy_Rodent
Dicere
MockingQuantum (Nutbush City Limits)
Slightly Lions
LunchinTard
derp (Disco Inferno)
Bad Seafood (1984)
Lily Catts
Chairchucker (Thief of Hearts)
sebmojo (GoldenEye)
Flyerant
SurreptitiousMuffin
Yoruichi
Idle Amalgam
crimea (One of the Living)
Cephas
Tars Tarkas
Mrenda
Sham bam bamina!
Wahad
DigitalRaven
Simply Simon (Ball of Confusion)
Antivehicular (Something Beautiful Remains)
Lord Zedd-Repulse
flerp (Back Where You Started)

Thranguy fucked around with this message at 08:53 on Jun 10, 2023

curlingiron
Dec 15, 2006

b l o o p

In :toxx:

RandomPauI
Nov 24, 2006


Grimey Drawer
I'm in, there's been a phrase stuck at the back of my mind all week May as well do something with it

rohan
Mar 19, 2008

Look, if you had one shot
or one opportunity
To seize everything you ever wanted
in one moment
Would you capture it...
or just let it slip?


:siren:"THEIR":siren:




in, flash me

Beezus
Sep 11, 2018

I never said I was a role model.

Ring-a-ding-in, baby.

Djeser
Mar 22, 2013


it's crow time again

Well gosh guess I should in

Albatrossy_Rodent
Oct 6, 2021

Obliteratin' everything,
incineratin' and renegade 'em
I'm here to make anybody who
want it with the pen afraid
But don't nobody want it but
they're gonna get it anyway!


In

Dicere
Oct 31, 2005
Non plaudite modo pecuniam jacite.

You better believe I'm in.

MockingQuantum
Jan 20, 2012



In, flash plz

Slightly Lions
Apr 13, 2009

Look what I can do!
In.

Obviously, the losertar is not an impediment to my enjoyment of the thread. I like that it gives some stakes to the contest, though I do find the much more motivating factor to be desire not to lose my shiny gangtag, which is why I don't enter if I don't think I'll have time to write a passable story.

LurchinTard
Aug 25, 2022
I'm in.

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

rohan posted:

in, flash me


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qoe3Coaq5VM
(Afterglow)

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

MockingQuantum posted:

In, flash plz


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jg7qrYqJ9ns
(Nutbush City Limits)

derp
Jan 21, 2010

when i get up all i want to do is go to bed again

Lipstick Apathy
In, flash

Bad Seafood
Dec 10, 2010


If you must blink, do it now.
I'm in.

Flash me Amadeus.

Lily Catts
Oct 17, 2012

Show me the way to you
(Heavy Metal)
ah, whatever! I'm in

Chairchucker
Nov 14, 2006

to ride eternal, shiny and chrome

THUNDERDOME LOSER 2022




Hello may I please have a song.

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010


Legit Cyberpunk









In and flash

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

derp posted:

In, flash


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rJa7Z-Tfpyk
(Disco Inferno)

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

Bad Seafood posted:

I'm in.

Flash me Amadeus.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LOycYEA57y0
(1984)

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

Chairchucker posted:

Hello may I please have a song.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rH4gruvDwXg
(Thief of Hearts)

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

sebmojo posted:

In and flash


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qGPBFvDz_HM
(GoldenEye)

Flyerant
Jun 4, 2021

to ride eternal, shiny and chrome

THUNDERDOME LOSER 2024
I'll have like a day to write this, but I'm IN!

SurreptitiousMuffin
Mar 21, 2010
Yeah gently caress it in

Yoruichi
Sep 21, 2017


Horse Facts

True and Interesting Facts about Horse


Omg if everyone else is doing it then I am in too

Idle Amalgam
Mar 7, 2008

said I'm never lackin'
always pistol packin'
with them automatics
we gon' send 'em to Heaven
In :toxx:

MockingQuantum
Jan 20, 2012



We need two more judges too!!!

Sitting Here
Dec 31, 2007
Hey guys! At the beginning of the year, we said we were going to create a companion thread for Thunderdome to create a space for more chat and support. Then we didn't do that. Why? Because it was a fiddly thing that was easy to backburner. The thread exists now. Everyone is welcome, whether you are a lurker, a newb, a seasoned vet, or someone just sort of interested in talking about things tangentially related to the Thunderdome flash fiction contest.

Here is the thread.

To get discussion going over there, I would really like to raise the following question: What would be a fun interforum inter-forum activity or contest? With the goal being to bring more people to Thunderdome, or CC on a whole.

crimea
Nov 16, 2012

THUNDERDOME LOSER 2020
In, flash.

Thranguy
Apr 21, 2010


Deceitful and black-hearted, perhaps we are. But we would never go against the Code. Well, perhaps for good reasons. But mostly never.

crimea posted:

In, flash.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RP39e1YJB9U
(One of the Living)

Chernobyl Princess
Jul 31, 2009

It has long been an axiom of mine that the little things are infinitely the most important.

:siren:thunderdome winner:siren:

CRITS FROM WEEK 560

A Lovely Light by Admiralty Flag

The one where a single dad has a weekend with his kids.

One of the things I like about this is that itís sweet without denying the sour. Those stupid bursts of anger that inspire you to be an rear end in a top hat to your kid. The absolute exhaustion. The desire to get any time to yourself, which quickly gets eaten by all the other demands of life. But all of that doesnít matter when your kid has a nightmare and just needs you. This did a good job of showing both having to parent and getting to parent.

There are points whether the choppy detachment works against it, and points where it underscores the exhaustion of the main character. I also think it would be better if only one of the two child emergencies were a nightmare, not that thatís not realistic, but because in sub 800 word stories it feels, to me, like a waste to repeat a device.

talking in the back by flerp

The one where a little girl talks to her uncle about her dead grandfather and he has Feelings.

I liked this one, it was sweet. It featured a kid, but the kid was a device for the main character to explore his feelings (or lack thereof) about the death of his father. I think it may not ring entirely true, kids do tend to ask remarkably penetrating questions, especially about life and death. They also tend to want to tell you about Pokemon at exhausting length, and will switch back and forth between the two rapidly.

I think this would have been improved by showing a memory of the main character and his father, maybe at a different funeral, when the mc was the same age as the niece in the story. Maybe something to showcase why heís feeling complicated.

Pegasus by Violet_Sky

The one where a pegasus takes kids to an all-kids afterlife and itís kinda hosed up!

Iíll be honest, this went fully over my head the first time I read it. Still, thereís a seed of something extremely cool and sinister and candy-coated here that I wish I could really dig into. You did a great job on emphasizing the Vibe of this piece, it drifts neatly into its unsettling, discordant ending.

But I think you bury the lede of the Pegasus being not just inhuman but being potentially malevolent. At least how humans would interpret malevolence. I also think it ends on the wrong line, ďBut that was just a fairy taleĒ has enough menace and dissonance to it in context without the ending question. I want more of that dissonance. If you ever revisit this concept Iíd love to read it.

The Blur by archduke.iago

The one where a kidís family decides he should grow up as fast as he can.

There is an enormous pressure we put on kids to Grow Up. Itís painful. Especially if we see them struggling, we want to fast forward them through the struggle. We want them to be the people we wanted to be, and some parents will absolutely push their kid through extremes of discomfort to get them ďpastĒ all the developmentally necessary struggles of childhood.

This has rough patches, but like Pegasus it captured the Vibe of a specific discomfort so neatly that it wound up my favorite of the week.


Ollie, Ollie by Thranguy

The one where a girl learns the secret to being the Best Hider in local games of hide n seek

The world of this was built very well and very cleanly. The voice was unmistakably that of a child without the work being childish.

But I canít shake the sense that it didnít earn its ending. Other than his ability to go to the moon, which is presented just as a Fact, thereís nothing to indicate that Xavier is some sort of fairy creature that would need to be killed with a sprig of holly. It makes the ending jarring, and not in a ďoh goodness I am worried for this childĒ way, but in a ďwait this wasnít the story I thought I was reading, did I miss somethingĒ way. Itís a cool ending and a cool beginning, they just donít meld together as seamlessly as Iíd like.

Someone I Respect by Chili

The one where a girl remembers meeting her best friend.

This was cute. A little snapshot of the drama of late elementary/early middle school. A look into the work it takes to actually become friends with and close with someone.

The meat of the story, when her dad questions why she isnít trying for more, comes a little late. I think seeding some more bits of that social imperative, that searching for the absolute best social opportunity possible, would drive the ending home even more powerfully. Her choice of Helena and decision to push back on her parents is meaningful because it had been so ingrained.

But you get like a thousand bonus points for writing the only non-downer story of the week.

Cephas
May 11, 2009

Humanity's real enemy is me!
Hya hya foowah!
Sure, I'm in.

Tars Tarkas
Apr 13, 2003

Rock the Mok



A nasty woman, I think you should try is, Jess.


in

Mrenda
Mar 14, 2012
Apocalypse In

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Sham bam bamina!
Nov 6, 2012

ƨtupid cat
In for the first time in a while.

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