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(Link to Part Two of Three on the previous page) Chapter 46 - In The Dead of Night Part Three of Three quote:
“Someone walked right through the front door, killed more than thirty guards, and released over a hundred prisoners. Could it perhaps be possible that there may have been a security breach?”  I think this explains Railrunner’s remark that Amusement Park Between is “a place from the most imaginative mind” and Thunderbark’s assertion that their world has “technology that is far more advanced than any humans” – amusement park rides are simply so stupid, every single last one of them, that they truly do think that buildings, flora, fauna and weather exactly like those of the “real world” is “most imaginative” and that an absence of concrete, electric lighting and telecommunications devices is evidence of “far more advanced technology”. quote:
Why is the prison warden on the roof-top? Does he not have an office? Is he hosting a roof-top party? Why does nothing in the story make the slightest lick of sense? quote:
“Dignity” = /= “Cruelty”. quote:
Why does Railrunner need to “wait” for the warden to come closer? It’s not as though his “concussion beams” have been established to have a limited effective range. Why does the warden charge with his sword? If the prison guards mistake Railrunner for the warden, it means the warden is himself a roller coaster, so why doesn’t the warden attack from range with bending? quote:
As usual, Railrunner does not give the slightest drat about collateral damage to his “friends” and the other prisoners who are still in the prison. quote:
He’s not even pretending to be “heroic” any more. He’s “grinning” as he watches his foes being “slaughtered”, and he admits that this isn’t about good and evil or protecting the innocent, this is about conquest of territory and personal gain. quote:
He doesn’t even ask them to surrender or try to capture them; he just flat out slaughters them. Our quote:
I defy anyone to name a protagonist in any published work of fiction who is more loathsome and unsympathetic than Railrunner.
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alcharagia posted:What, but why blood for the blood coaster skulls for the skull throne (once he steals it from Ironwheel)
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Bobbin's take on Amusement Park Universe reminds me a lot of Stephen King's The Regulators, with objects manifested as their platonic forms and the main characters using that to their advantage. Looking forward to more!
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quote:Below us was a prison that looked like Alcatraz. alcharagia posted:What, but why  . It will never come up again. As far as Miranda is concerned it was awesome and everyone is clapping like a seal. One clap for every innocent and unfairly-maligned creature Railrunner slaughters.
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I got a question. How the hell can Railrunner resemble the warden? Oh, I'm sure that here are some minute details of the face equal to how we can tell people apart by the face and how pet owners can recognize their labrador from a sea of labradors. However those minute details between two individuals do not really matter when they are of two different colors! And also when Railrunner is a red roller coaster, there is no mistaking him for anyone else. So how do they resemble? Do they have full-face skull helmets on? Do they both wear magic trenchcoats that hide their main color? Please note the level of violence, ruthlessness and self-gratification bordering on masturbation in this chapter, or maybe just how long this chapter was. Then remember this was just to take over a prison. Then remember this same army is going to take down a capital city, which is going to be much bigger than just mere prison.
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alcharagia posted:What, but why To be fair, I'm not sure prison wardens actually have the power to just order all their prisoners released, just like that. And the real warden is still in the prison so they probably wouldn't get very far before he finds out and there's a fight anyway. I think my favorite part of the chapter was the warden, a professional in position of authority, randomly charging someone with deadly intent because he didn't immediately identify himself. Not even pulling his sword and demanding RR identify himself again, which would be reasonable, but "who are you? ... Prepare to die!!  "
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Iced Cocoa posted:I did not see that twist coming. And while Black is certainly getting powers and insights in each chapter, it still feels more of a natural progression rather than power of convenience. While he may be diagnosed with small case of MC Syndrome, it still feels not like a cop-out and more realistic, well, within the rules of the world. Keep in mind that he's still a squishy human in a land full of super-strong, super-fast, regenerating steel monstrosities. He's gotta Batman it up if he wants any hope of surviving. And don't forget what color a Glock pistol is; with his issues with remembering details, I'm not sure Black will remember that fact in time... quote:I looked back to the army again, I raised my sword high in the air, and like dominoes they all followed me. So does that mean they're all a bunch of faceless interchangeable mooks, or that they're setting themselves up for a fall? 
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Bobbin Threadbare posted:Keep in mind that he's still a squishy human in a land full of super-strong, super-fast, regenerating steel monstrosities. He's gotta Batman it up if he wants any hope of surviving. And don't forget what color a Glock pistol is; with his issues with remembering details, I'm not sure Black will remember that fact in time... I won't matter much, what with his last name and all.
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JosephWongKS posted:I defy anyone to name a protagonist in any published work of fiction who is more loathsome and unsympathetic than Railrunner. Humbert Humbert?
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quote:“That’s right, I am firing you.” I said snapping my wheels like I would fingers. My allies suddenly drew their swords and slammed them into the guards. The grey soldier stared at me in shock then back to the sword that stuck out of his belly. Took me literally 5 seconds. quote:“Sorry, seems you didn't make the cut.” I smiled as he fell to the dirt ground dead. quote:“Budget cuts, you know how it is.” I smiled as he fell to the dirt ground dead. Literally 10 seconds. Pththya-lyi posted:Humbert Humbert? He eventually feels remorse for his actions. Judging from the sequel, Railrunner has no such revelations. What did Thomas Covenant do? Seraphic Neoman fucked around with this message at 18:12 on Jun 11, 2013 |
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Who's ready with their eyebleach? Here are some of the most horrifying things that Note, everything is  Let's start light. Just what happens when a roller coaster is about to give birth to a red?  http://i.imgur.com/cQHW4qD.jpg In the right page, to the left, the text says that the vagina only forms during labor. No sex bits at all until they're needed. But labor starts when the water breaks (where does it go out?) and the labor lasts between 30-48 hours. So, what comes next?  http://i.imgur.com/dOmSh2k.jpg Strange fact: I remember from the description of this piece that the orange coaster works as a midwife. In a world where that was the tenth birth. Miranda  And for the big finale.   http://i.imgur.com/SjyenGs.jpg
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Pththya-lyi posted:Humbert Humbert? The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > The Book Barn > Where I Read: Miranda Leek's "Twisted": Well, at least the main protagonist isn't a pedophile e: ^ Why the god-forsaken gently caress does Miranda have to go into such detail? 
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It does go through the whole length of the coaster! That's horrifying. Man oh man, they are really lucky that they are super special roller-coasters. Because that mother and child have an extremely high chance to have possibly-fatal complications occur during the process. I'm serious, at this point I would say a Caesarean would be a saner and less painful approach to this.
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SSNeoman posted:It does go through the whole length of the coaster! That's horrifying. Don't be silly, everyone knows that a pregnant roller coaster has the ability to bend its fetus and/or womb i.e. the ability to do "and other things". Chapter 7 posted:
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Jun 12, 2013 03:51
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Iced Cocoa posted:And for the big finale. I like how the roller coaster in the background looks like he's sneaking away. Nope, not part of this poo poo, see you later.
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Jun 12, 2013 04:44
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Mercedes posted:Who's a bigger monster now? You or Railrunner??? A world with "technology that is far more advanced than any humans" does not have an emoticon sufficient to express my... Well, it doesn't have a word for it, either. Horror? What's the thing that's a step above horror?
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Dreggon posted:A world with "technology that is far more advanced than any humans" does not have an emoticon sufficient to express my...
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SSNeoman posted:What did Thomas Covenant do? Read The Chronicles of Thomas Covenant if you want to know. He does eventually realize just how much of a horrible excuse for a human being he is, though, unlike Humbert and Railrunner.  Wow...
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Chapter 47 – Apocalypse Part One quote:
Give how stupid Railrunner is at the best of times, how can his focus on things get any more “cloudy or foggy”? quote:
Thunderbark was captured in Chapter 33. Railrunner threw a tantrum in Chapter 35, right after the capture of Thunderbark. In Chapter 36, “Within the next forty-five minutes we arrived on the outskirts of [Zegria]”, and Railrunner entered the arena tournament on the same day. In Chapter 39, they spent the night at The Silver Spoke. In Chapter 40, they left the hotel “at twilight” (Chapter 40), “as soon as the sun rises” (Chapter 39). In Chapter 41, they reached Xzerma, presumably on the same day, since it was “not but a few miles away”. Railrunner was put into a comatose state by Freakshow in the same chapter. In Chapter 43, Railrunner regained consciousness, and Chainlink revealed that he had been comatose for a week. In Chapter 44, “It vas [sic] very late at night”. Presumably it was the night of the same day as Chapter 43. In Chapter 45, “It was late in the afternoon”, presumably the afternoon following the night of Chapter 44. It was also stated that “The following night was the night we were to take action”. In Chapter 46, they began, and completed, the assault on the prison. All together, it had only been slightly over a week since Thunderbark had been captured, not “weeks” as Railrunner claims. quote:
“He can’t help his temper; that’s just the way he is,” said the battered wife of her abusive husband. quote:
“Linger on” =/= “Linger among” quote:
The waxing moon makes Railrunner stronger, but the waning moon doesn’t make him any weaker. Shouldn’t all red roller coasters be infinitely powerful after a certain number of lunar cycles, if each waxing moon grants a permanent boost of strength? quote:
“Beating heart” =/= “Vibrating heart”, though admittedly the monstrous abominations that are anthropomorphic amusement park rides could very well have hearts that vibrate. quote:
Merrylegs is clearly uneasy because Railrunner is right there next to her and she’s afraid of being killed and/or eaten by him, as he has threatened to do in the recent past. quote:
None of them had any qualms about slaughtering their foes. Why would she suddenly “don’t want to do this”? Railrunner is wrong and the true reason for Merrylegs’ unease is as I’ve set out above. quote:
This is thoroughly asinine reasoning. Setting aside the fact that his very presence makes it more likely that you’ll be killed and eaten in one of his murderous temper tantrums, his ability to “predict death” doesn’t increase the chances of anyone dying. Why should “the fact that [he] can predict death” make Merrylegs wonder if she is to die today? quote:
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See? See? For some reason that’s “pressing her luck” even though it’s an entirely justified and reasonable question. Kudos to Miranda Leek for remembering Railrunner’s pierced eyebrow, which was mentioned in Chapter 4. quote:
74th sigh of the book. quote:
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"Hey Railrunner, you can predict death, right?" "right" "And a few of these people here might die on this raid against Ironwheel." "lol yeah so what" "Well... are any of them going to die? If so, which ones?" "omg shut the gently caress up or ill kill you fuckin horse" "But... these might be the last moments of their lives. Surely you could warn them of possible dangers, like ambushes, or traps--" "gently caress OFF OR YOUR DEAD" Looks like we'll be trading one tyrant for another 
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Dreggon posted:"Hey Railrunner, you can predict death, right?" Amusement Park Between is trading a relatively benevolent and competent autocrat for a psychopathic murderous moron. As attackbunny pointed out: attackbunny posted:
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quote:It now seemed like I was the balance to this world. A force that was to keep things at ease, harmonizing the good and bad things that I seemed to have no control over. Yet I had no control over some of the things that had to do with me. I had the dreams that caused pain; I had different abilities than any other roller coaster. There was also a predatory instinct, making me lick my lips when I saw blood, laugh when I saw my enemy’s death. Why? Was there something wrong with me? Couldn’t be, I was the way I was because I was born and not built. Do you know how disturbing this is? It really says that nature trumps over nurture. That people are just born evil. It is in line with how the Fallen are created, caused by effects that they can't control but it was always going to be so. But here it is simply stated that Railrunner can't do anything wrong because he was born unlike the other rides. It doesn't matter that he was raised by humans and learned their morals, when he went coaster, he went all in and believes that the supreme being such as him is supposed to be bloodthirsty, predatory and wholly lacks empathy for others.
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The sun had long since set when Detective Black set off for the concrete building at the edge of town, but there were enough electric street lights that he was able to find the structure by the black silhouette it left on the forest behind it. Black had trouble searching the sides for a door, but eventually found one by using the faint glow of his cell phone. Out of curiosity, he checked the screen, but just as he suspected it informed him that he was out of the service area. The door was locked, but a few good kicks broke the latch. Black fumbled around for a light switch, then blinked in pain as his eyes adjusted to the bright florescent panels that lit the interior. When he could finally see again, the detective found that the building was just what he'd suspected: a series of connected rooms were lined floor to ceiling with shelves, cardboard boxes, and wooden crates. A large steel shutter in the floor of the largest room caught his interest, along with the accompanying manhole, but Black busied himself with hunting through the shelves and boxes until he found exactly what he was looking for: a medium-sized box stacked full of reels of yellow raffle tickets, still sealed in a protective plastic bag. Rick considered taking the entire box with him, but decided against it when he remembered they were supposed to be money in this world. Two spools hidden under his jacket would have to do for now. "Excuse me, sir, you're not supposed to be here." At the sound of the unknown voice, Detective Black dropped the tickets and spun around, hand on his pistol and heart pumping overtime. He found himself face to face with a nondescript man half his size dressed in a plain green coverall with the name "Justin" stitched onto the left breast. The short man had his arms crossed and looked plainly annoyed, but appeared unarmed beyond the tool belt around his waist. What made Black most uneasy, however, was the fact that he couldn't read him. During his years on the force, Black had found that his psychic power worked on all unprotected humans and near-humans, such as vampires, werewolves, and ghosts, but he had on occasion met fey spirits and extraterrestrials, and in neither case had his telepathy worked. Whatever the person in front of him looked like, Detective Black knew he was not--and never had been--human. Still, the situation itself was hardly unfamiliar to the detective, and he found his hand reaching for his badge out of instinct. Pausing for a moment, he decided that it was at least worth a shot, and completed the action. "Detective Richard Black, Paranormal Department," he announced, holding his shield out for the unknown creature to inspect. "Oh! Excuse me, sir!" Justin replied, surprising Black with a respectful bow. "We don't get many visitors back here. May I ask what your business is?" "I, um, I need to speak with your supervisor. It's a confidential matter." "Certainly, sir. Let me just finish my delivery and I'll take you down to him." The detective followed the short man back to the large room, where he now saw a clean, freshly painted yellow forklift laden with a large pallet of secured boxes. Justin climbed onto the forklift controls that were sized perfectly for him and drove it over to the far wall, where he dropped the stack and reversed back onto the elevator platform which had emerged from the metal shutters. Justin waved Black over. "Please come stand next to me on the lift, Detective." Once he had done so, the man turned and pressed a button on the wall behind him. "Watch your arms, sir. This lift has no safety rails." With a jolt the elevator dropped down into a long tunnel. As the shutter closed above them, a series of amber lights flickered on along the walls, giving Black a sense of just how many hundreds of feet below the surface they were going. After Black had popped his ears twice, the lift clattered to a halt and another set of shutters whispered open in front of the two occupants. Justin carefully drove his surprisingly quiet forklift over the lip and partway down a ramp which led into a massive warehouse, then pointed off to an elevated office that overlooked the chamber from the opposite wall. "Just follow the catwalks around the edge until you reach the office. If the boss isn't there, his secretary will know where to find him. Now if you don't mind, I've got some more deliveries to make tonight." Black nodded and let the operator continue down into the warehouse. The catwalks were easily accessed from a staircase whose stairs were so small and close together that the detective was forced to take them two at a time. The walkway had enough room above it that Black could stand straight, but the rails only came up to his knees, leaving him somewhat anxious about getting too close to the edge. From his vantage point, he saw a large number of other workers in the warehouse, some on foot and some in forklifts, all of whom looked and dressed almost identically to Justin. Black also noticed that he was getting more than a few stares in his direction and hurried over to the office. Detective Black was forced to duck and squeeze sideways through the office door, and the paneled ceiling was just a bit too low for him to stand erect. The man behind the secretary's desk was also dressed in a green coverall, although this one had "Kyle" stitched above the breast pocket. "Excuse me, sir?" Kyle asked. "What are you doing here? This area is authorized for gnomes only." Feeling more confident, Black flashed his badge again and identified himself. Kyle acted more puzzled than differential, however. Pressing a button on an old-fashioned intercom, he said, "Hey, Boss? I've got a...Detective Black here to see you?" "Detective?" the intercom crackled. "Send him in, I suppose." Kyle shrugged and waved towards the door leading in. The man standing behind the large desk in the inner office looked just the same as every other gnome Black had seen, except that the words "Warehouse Boss" were written where his name tag would have gone. However, a glint of thoughtfulness in the boss's eyes led Black to suspect that he might understand the situation better than any of his underlings could. "Good evening, Detective Black," the gnome greeted him, stretching out a hand which Rick shook. "My apologies if anyone gave you a hard time, but it's very rare for us to get any visitors. Possibly unprecedented, but we've been around so long it can be hard to keep track sometimes. Normally, the inhabitants of this world are unable to see us gnomes or our outposts, let alone reach the Factory and arrange a visit with a foreman such as myself. Might I ask how you managed it?" "I'm, er, not an amusement ride. I'm a human," Black explained awkwardly. "And I'm a detective. I figure it's one of those things that lets me see you guys." The foreman nodded sagely. "That makes sense. We don't get too many of any of those things. Well, now that you're here, what did you want?" Rick scratched his chin, still trying to process everything he had seen. "Say, how'd you like a tour?" the gnome offered. Deciding it could only help, Black accepted. Grinning at the prospect of showing off, the foreman led the way out of his office. "It would seem the detective wants a tour of the Factory," he informed his secretary. "Hold the fort while I'm gone." With a wave, the gnome strutted out onto the catwalks and opened a door that led further into the complex.
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Well that fanfiction is great and all ( certainly reminds me that Bobbin is a skilled writer...) but I have a question about Park's monetary system. As I understand they have coin dispensers and arcade games. Coin dispensers give you X coins per day, while arcade games give you Y tickets in exchange for coins assuming you do well on them. Both of those are maintained by gnomes but from the rides' perspective they are for all intents and purposed magical and infinite. Same thing with all the supplies rides need be it food, drinks or clothing. The only reason they even bother with coins is that Iron raptor makes them use them just so he can tax them. Alright, how the hell does that work? Does he tax them higher than X? If so, why are there no bloody feuds over resource-producing buildings like bars that would provide income? If he taxes them below X why are there any talks about using those as currency? As for tickets- why would you ever want them? Their worth is determined solely by how many coins you need to spend on 1 on average, yet Iron Raptor steals them from lucky winners. Do they have any intrinsic value? If not, then there is no point in trying to win those, especially when getting a bunch of those just sets you to Y=X.
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DmitriX posted:Well that fanfiction is great and all ( certainly reminds me that Bobbin is a skilled writer...) but I have a question about Park's monetary system. The use of coins and tickets as currency had been in place since before Iron Raptor took over. Their use wasn't strictly necessary, but in the sense that that "Please" and "Thank you" or server tips (in America) aren't necessary--that is, you could still get what you wanted, but you'd be considered very rude unless you had a valid excuse, like an addiction to arcade games without the skills to get tickets. As such, there wasn't much to drive to use them to get rich and so the coins dispensed every day were distributed more or less evenly between the community. Oddly enough, the dispensers always seemed to produce enough coins for everyone to get a fair share regardless of how big the community was. When Iron Raptor came around, he wanted the best of everything reserved for himself and his cronies, even though there was no real reason to hoard resources. To Raptor, it was the disparity that mattered, the acknowledgement that he and his were better and should thus get better stuff. To enforce this disparity, he made the use of coins and tickets mandatory and set agents at every dispensary to make sure his crew got the lion's share. They then tax business operators so they can't ever get too wealthy, either, and to make sure that the coins and tickets are being properly used. In regards to tickets, his agents only grow interested in someone if he or she starts to win too often, enough so that their wealth might rival that of Iron Raptor's followers. In response, the other rides have taken either to only winning a few tickets per day, working with other rides to distract the agents and sneak away with a large amount, or else bribing the agents to look the other way after taking a large cut.
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There is still no valid reason to deliberately play games for tickets, since unless you are good at them you will just lose money, and if you don't, you get robbed by minions and break even or get a very slight profit(unless you employ bribery or diversions but that's not a reason for tickets to be valuable). Also if resources are infinite and anyone could just self-serve themselves, why would it be rude to take them without paying? Paying whom anyway? How do they determine who owns the source of infinite resources?
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DmitriX posted:There is still no valid reason to deliberately play games for tickets, since unless you are good at them you will just lose money, and if you don't, you get robbed by minions and break even or get a very slight profit(unless you employ bribery or diversions but that's not a reason for tickets to be valuable). Tickets were valuable before Iron Raptor took over and he has since enforced the ticket-coin trade rate since it benefits him. Besides that, you are allowed to make a certain profit by playing, since Raptor cronies take significantly more coins than what others get; between that, the taxes, and the ticket thefts, there is definitely some wiggle room to be had between haves and have-nots. Also, the coin agents all have pretty individual ideas on how much is "too much" and when it's time to force winners to trade back. quote:Also if resources are infinite and anyone could just self-serve themselves, why would it be rude to take them without paying? Paying whom anyway? How do they determine who owns the source of infinite resources? Rides can claim ownership of shops, hotels, bars, etc., and that ownership is usually acknowledged by the community. Admittedly, they can't act as much more than tellers and salespeople, but it gives folks something to do and a reason to feel useful in a world that provides everything for its inhabitants. You might say that Park Beyond relies solely on the service industry. 
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Iced Cocoa posted:And for the big finale.  That's about the appropriate reaction: confused terror bordering on physical illness. To quote Zack Parsons in his review of SWAP.AVI: "I check my revolver but I have fired off my last cartridge at an Indian I caught eating a discarded shoe from my trash. I place the pistol to my temple and pull the trigger anyway. One of them seems to be crying. Click. Click. Click." On the list of things I never thought I'd see, a rollercoaster with breasts and a vagina giving birth to another rollercoaster as a carousel horse watches in abject horror was pretty high on the list as impossible. What a quaint world my mind once occupied. 
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Chapter 47 – Apocalypse Part Two of Two quote:
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No one in this story could possibly stoop low enough to reach Railrunner’s level. quote:
These are amusement park planes, aren’t they? Don’t those have fixed wings? Why would their wings “beat”, let alone like a moth’s? quote:
Why doesn’t the capital city of the brutal dictator have any anti-air defences? quote:
Initially, “… five planes fluttered from the trees and toward Alcator”. Now only two planes have landed. What happened to the remaining three planes? Or had Miranda Leek already forgotten the number of planes which were originally sent out? That has to be a new record for the speed at which one section of the story contradicts an earlier section. quote:
“Back” and “Flank” are mutually exclusive. quote:
A world with technology so advanced, they need to rely on personal messengers and couriers to convey messages to different sections of the army, instead of using radio or other telecommunications devices. quote:
The water has a rotten odor because Railrunner is there. quote:
Does it even count as a “wood” if the vegetation is so short that you can peek “over” the edge? quote:
The capital city of the brutal dictatorship has no patrols or guard posts at its outskirts. quote:
Why are they “smashing up” the city? Aren’t they there to “defend” the civilians against the Fallen’s homicidal plans? quote:
Hasn’t Railrunner already “ran forward and roared”? What is left for him to charge “forward” to? quote:
Why are they just throwing things indiscriminately? Aren’t they there to “defend” the civilians against the Fallen’s homicidal plans? quote:
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Why is Railrunner tiring? Moonhoof said that Railrunner has “unlimited energy” in Amusement Park Between, “especially because [he] bare [sic] the Augu Ra”. quote:
They are causing more damage and destruction to the city and not only does he not care, he’s “laughing in pure amusement”. Yet somehow we are still supposed to treat Railrunner as a “hero”. How can anyone aspiring to be a writer be so utterly oblivious? quote:
Why is he “horrified”? He had “nodded” when Razorblade said “Because we wanted a fight! We are going to attract the king’s men!” quote:
Why is he fighting hand-to-hand? Wouldn’t concussion beams be more effective? Hadn’t he said that “Concussion beams seemed the way to go”? quote:
Why are their numbers wearing thin? Can’t he just obliterate everyone with fire or lightning or concussion beams or the Augu Ra’s disintegration ray, the way he did at the prison? quote:
That’s a lot of “Then”s and “Suddenly”s, with one “Then suddenly” to boot. quote:
Aren’t Railrunner’s forces and the Fallen fighting in mixed melee? Won’t the cannons be firing on both forces? Why are they deliberately killing their own forces? Also, why do the “swinging ships” have any effect at all? Isn’t it well-established that roller coasters can only be harmed by other roller coasters? quote:
Again, aren’t Railrunner’s forces and the Fallen fighting in mixed melee? Won’t the fire be burning both forces? Why is he deliberately killing his own forces? quote:
“Confinement” =/= “Confusion”. Also, how was the fire able to distinguish between friendly and hostile forces? quote:
75th sigh of the book. Also, how do you just “forget” about your primary objective? quote:
Hasn’t Merrylegs already needed rescuing not once but twice (the first time from the Fallen bumper car at Trenzon, the second time from the Fallen pirate plane when they were travelling on that ship)? And isn’t it well-established that Static is utterly worthless? What could their presence possibly “take care of”? JosephWongKS fucked around with this message at 05:04 on Jun 13, 2013 |
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"Man, we are gonna LIBERATE the poo poo out of this town." I can't wait for the climactic battle that will take place in the castle! After Railrunner cradles Thunderbark's corpse of course. Because he's the mentor, ya know?
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JosephWongKS posted:Does it even count as a “wood” if the vegetation is so short that you can peek “over” the edge? No, see, they are looking up over the wood of the dock from in the water. Because it is a wooden dock. Feel free to roll out "a world with technology so advanced" yet again. At least in my own experience, the usage of the word you thought it was going for is generally "woods", but that might just be growing up in a rural area speaking.
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And so Railrunner literally nuked a dimension designed to be a paradise.
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SSNeoman posted:"Man, we are gonna LIBERATE the poo poo out of this town." "We had to destroy the town in order to save it." Oblivion4568238 posted:No, see, they are looking up over the wood of the dock from in the water. Because it is a wooden dock. Feel free to roll out "a world with technology so advanced" yet again. At least in my own experience, the usage of the word you thought it was going for is generally "woods", but that might just be growing up in a rural area speaking. They couldn't have been doing that, because they'd both already "climbed onto the dock" before they "peeked over the edge of the wood". Miranda Leek posted:
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The illustration for this chapter: Why are we supposed to think they're the good guys again?
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JosephWongKS posted:They couldn't have been doing that, because they'd both already "climbed onto the dock" before they "peeked over the edge of the wood". Ah, well, uh... new rollercoaster power! Able to generate wooden cover that can be hidden behind at any time!
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Chapter 48 - Twisted Truthquote:
Why did they even have to “sneak” into the lair if “all the guards were dead”? quote:
If he’s not already been killed during the indiscriminate destruction unleashed by Railrunner and his murderous cohorts in their “liberation” of Alcator. quote:
Why does the brutal dictator’s stronghold use iron for its dungeon doors when entire buildings in the small town of Trenzon were built of steel? quote:
How did Railrunner “look through each cell’s bars” when the cells “were closed with extremely heavy iron doors”? More importantly, how did Miranda Leek forget what she wrote literally one sentence ago?  quote:
Hasn’t Railrunner already detected Thunderbark’s scent? Doesn’t that already establish that he’s still alive? quote:
Shouldn’t the “bruises and scars” be mentioned first if one is trying to describe why he “looked dreadful”? Or does Miranda Leek think that “longer and unkempt” eyebrows” and a “slight beard” is more awful than “bruises and scars”? Also, Thunderbark already had an “unkempt beard” when he was first introduced back in Chapter One (“Then an old man with long white hair pulled into a low ponytail and a small unkempt beard and mustache advanced toward my position”), so his captivity had nothing to do with said beard. quote:
Railrunner is easily confused. quote:
“Oh boy, here we go. With the bizarre material once again” is by no means a normal reaction to a revelation about the death of one’s mother and the fact that the previous tale was a lie. Railrunner is just an out-and-out sociopath in every respect by now. quote:
Erm, what? Railrunner doesn’t actually “know what happens”. quote:
How did Railrunner, who had not yet even been born, “allow” his mother to “enter the temple for safekeeping”? quote:
76th sigh of the book. quote:
Tension rising… quote:
And defused two paragraphs later. quote:
I don’t know about you, but I’m rooting for Ironwheel here.
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