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kurona_bright
Mar 21, 2013


Wait, why did I get a DQ? I sent it in at 9 PM PST, and right after I sent it I saw crabrock talking about the extended deadline. Did I make a formatting mistake?

Also, that'll teach me to feel confident in my stories.

In for this week.

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Gau
Nov 18, 2003

I don't think you understand, Gau.


I regret sitting last week out, I had a great idea and just didn't seize it in time. Hit me.

Kaishai
Nov 3, 2010

Scoffing at modernity.

Everyone in so far has a season and an element. Check the prompt post to find yours!

docbeard
Jul 18, 2011

High marks for compassion, low marks for survival skills





In!

crabrock
Aug 2, 2002


Grimey Drawer

kurona_bright posted:

Wait, why did I get a DQ? I sent it in at 9 PM PST, and right after I sent it I saw crabrock talking about the extended deadline. Did I make a formatting mistake?

Also, that'll teach me to feel confident in my stories.

In for this week.

One person got a DQ for being 200 words over the limit (TRUCKS)

one person got a DQ for not signing up before submitting a story (Claire)

one person got a DQ for misreading an email address

so which were you?

FouRPlaY
May 5, 2010


In for this week.

kurona_bright
Mar 21, 2013


crabrock posted:

One person got a DQ for being 200 words over the limit (TRUCKS)

one person got a DQ for not signing up before submitting a story (Claire)

one person got a DQ for misreading an email address

so which were you?

The second one, I guess. I honestly thought I pm'd N. Senada...
Oh, well. Sorry about that.

Ironic Twist
Aug 3, 2008

THUNDERDOME LOSER



In with a .

Paladinus
Jan 11, 2014





In with the meanest .

J.A.B.C.
Jul 2, 2007

There's no need to rush to be an adult.


I throw my bones into the true crucible of ThunderDome for the first time. It's a mix of trepidation, anticipation, and a clenching of the buttocks.

IN

May whatever Gods remain have mercy on my soul.

SurreptitiousMuffin
Mar 21, 2010

I got it wrong. Look, I'm well aware I got it wrong and uh, I got it wrong.


Are we gonna officially find out who wrote what? Does senada know?

In.

Phobia
Apr 25, 2011

I'm a suave detective with a heart of gold in hot pursuit of the malevolent, manipulative
MIAMI MUTILATOR
and the deranged degenerates who only want their
15 MINUTES OF FAME.


OCK.


Lmao I wish I wrote a story about the pumpking.

Uhh... In? Also I think I failed last time so this is a

Your Sledgehammer
May 10, 2010

Don`t fall asleep, you gotta write for THUNDERDOME

Obliterati posted:

I will also do three line-by-lines for the first responders.

Many thanks, I'm interested in a line-by-line crit. I guess now is the time for us to reveal which story we wrote?

crabrock
Aug 2, 2002


Grimey Drawer

N senada knows, but he's probably clawing his eyes out after merely glimpsing those stories, so go ahead and fess up.

Your Sledgehammer
May 10, 2010

Don`t fall asleep, you gotta write for THUNDERDOME

I was the composer of Pumpking and earned my first DM.

crabrock
Aug 2, 2002


Grimey Drawer

Kaishai posted:

Year Progress: ├████┼████┼████┼████┼████┼████┼████┼████┼████┼████┼────┼────┤

Wins Progress: ├█████████┼█████████┼█████████┼█████████┼█████████┼█████████┤

Status: TARGET REACHED WITHIN ACCEPTABLE TEMPORAL PARAMETERS. (Graph courtesy of crabrock.)


ok why don't you just rub it in a little

in

Fumblemouse
Mar 21, 2013


STANDARD
DEVIANT


Grimey Drawer

In.

(If anyone cares, Crabrock correctly guessed that I wrote the Pirate's Assistant (thanks for the ++crit, sir), though he may not have known it was to honour the anniversary of receiving my tribal name, Slices-Babies-With-Knives)

N. Senada
May 17, 2011


The most frequently used word - excluding poo poo like 'the' - when all texts were combined was Pumpkin with 154 occurrences.


crabrock posted:

Results Post for Week 117: Pumpkin Carving Adventures Doledrums

This is the Wall of Shame/Fame

Congrats to the latter, what the gently caress? to the former.


crabrock posted:

Winner - Pumpkin Dreams, one of the only stories that actually managed to TELL A STORY, not have some out-of-place gore insert, and bring us to a satisfying conclusion.
Obviously Kaishai

crabrock posted:

HM - A Curious Thing, a fun tale of time travel and who-dun-it that unfortunately ends too abruptly and doesn't have enough depth to be considered for the win
Chairchucker

crabrock posted:

HM - In Memoriam - A fun, jaunty tale of some kid and his dad, which unfortunately is just that. We all agreed we'd like to read more, but in and of itself, this is not a complete story.
{b}Tyrannosaurus[/b} and I'm personally [i}very{/i] sorry about the confusion on
code:
formatting
.

crabrock posted:

Loser - A Mother's Worst Fear - Holy MRA Batman. What the christ was going on in this story? It started off that one judge had this for the loss. As we discussed it more, the other two judges started frothing at the mouth and deemed that yes, this was the worst story. Not the most incomprehensible (congratulations #14), but the one that tried the most and fell flat on its face. We all hated reading this. Chicks sure are sluts, right?
Some Guy TT




crabrock posted:

DM - The Pilgrims and the Great Pumpkin - It's like somebody took a history lesson, put it into some sort of Google Translate, did that back and forth a few times and then pasted it as a story.

Tomn - Nonpartisan note 1 - this was the first submission I got and I didn't particularly dislike and it made me optimistic for the kind of insane stuff this prompt might provide.

Also, congrats Tomn on making the board your first time in TD. Stick with it, I lost, I think, my very first time (if not second).

crabrock posted:

DM - The Balad of Igor Shishkin - You typoed your title dude. I think that says enough.

JcDent - Nonpartisan Note 2 - This was the 6th story I received, and I was starting to feel less optimistic.


crabrock posted:

DM - Sclerotinia - Nobody knew what this story was trying to say or get at, even if some of the imagery is nice.

Hammer Bro

crabrock posted:

DM - Harvest Rites - Literally not one judge understood what the hell was going on here, and if this is even English.

ThirdEmperor This was story #14

crabrock posted:

DM - Pumpking - While this could have easily been stuck in the middle, your tactless portrayal of your side character really brought this down a level. Add in a totally unlikable main char, and you have a recipe for disaster.



Your Sledgehammer - fulfilling the Congratulations on not getting banned!


People who signed up but did not submit this week.

Toaster Beef

Fuschia Tude

Ironic Twist

NewTestLeper

N. Senada
May 17, 2011


Also, for the Judges, here's the names linked with the story #
code:
1.	Tomn
2.	Jitzu the Monk
3.	Flosofl 
4.	Cacto
5.	Chairchucker
6.	Jc Dent
7.	Hammer Bro
8.	Ze Bourgeoisie
9.	Sitting Here
10.	Fumblemouse
11.	Some Guy TT
12.	Kaishai
13.	Grizzled Patriarch
14.	Third Emperor
15.	Nethilia
16.	Tyrannosaurus
17.	Your Sledgehammer (TOXX)
18.	Toaster Beef  No Entry
19.	Fuschia Tude  No Entry
20.	Ironic Twist  No Entry - Confirmed
21.	NewTestLeper  No Entry - Confirmed

N. Senada fucked around with this message at Nov 4, 2014 around 03:23

Proteus Jones
Feb 28, 2013




Hair Elf

N. Senada posted:

Also, for the Judges, here's the names linked with the story #
code:
1.	Tomn
2.	Jitzu the Monk
3.	Floslf
4.	Cacto
5.	Chairchucker
6.	Jc Dent
7.	Hammer Bro
8.	Ze Bourgeoisie
9.	Sitting Here
10.	Fumblemouse
11.	Some Guy TT
12.	Kaishai
13.	Grizzled Patriarch
14.	Third Emperor
15.	Nethilia
16.	Tyrannosaurus
17.	Your Sledgehammer (TOXX)
18.	Toaster Beef  No Entry
19.	Fuschia Tude  No Entry
20.	Ironic Twist  No Entry - Confirmed
21.	NewTestLeper  No Entry - Confirmed


Correction: 3. Flosofl

N. Senada
May 17, 2011


I'll post a key for the rest of you with story titles tomorrow, but I've been dealing with a sick kid all day and am ready to pass out.

It was fun getting to help out. Sorry about formatting issues, that was probably my fault. I tried to catch it before I posted it for judging. Sorry if I still messed up!

ceaselessfuture posted:

Wait, did you guys not get my story then?

I might have sent it to the wrong email, I guess. NSenada@gmail.com?


e: oh poo poo, NSenadaSA haha ha ha..

Mind if I post it anyway?

ee: gently caress i am actually upset about this, sorry dudes.

Sorry about that, hope there's somebody out there that really enjoyed reading unsolicited flash fiction with pumpkin references.

kurona_bright posted:

The second one, I guess. I honestly thought I pm'd N. Senada...
Oh, well. Sorry about that.

I double-checked my messages and emails but didn't see your entry. Sorry

Maybe claim it's Lowtax's fault and sue him or something.

flosofl posted:

Correction: 3. Flosofl

poo poo, sorry, I blame my tired brain and poor writing skills. Fixed

kurona_bright
Mar 21, 2013


Don't worry about it. I've had brain errors when it comes to sending email and stuff before, so it's not exactly the biggest surprise for me.

Obliterati posted:

I will also do three line-by-lines for the first responders.

ALSO ALSO, I am in.

I know my story was DQ'd, but would you be willing to do that for me? I wrote "If At First...".

JcDent
May 13, 2013

Give me a rifle, one round, and point me at Berlin!


Hell, I'm in

Also, was I the overall looser this week, too?

Anathema Device
Dec 22, 2009

by Ion Helmet


In

Nethilia
Oct 17, 2012

Hullabalooza '96
Easily Depressed
Teenagers Edition


In like Flynn.

Armack
Jan 27, 2006

Corde pulsum tangite


JcDent posted:

Also, was I the overall looser this week, too?

Nope. You survived with a DM.

ThirdEmperor
Aug 7, 2013

BEHOLD MY GLORY

AND THEN

BRAWL ME


In again, I suppose.

Chairchucker
Nov 14, 2006

The man was stunningly well dressed. He had a smart looking jacket, and a really neat looking cape, the lining of which was shimmering and sparkling in more than Oriental splendour, which is a great deal of splendour indeed, just ask Kipling.


JcDent
May 13, 2013

Give me a rifle, one round, and point me at Berlin!



Well, that explains a lot, doesn't it? I'll just step away from they keyboard.

Chairchucker
Nov 14, 2006

The man was stunningly well dressed. He had a smart looking jacket, and a really neat looking cape, the lining of which was shimmering and sparkling in more than Oriental splendour, which is a great deal of splendour indeed, just ask Kipling.

JcDent posted:

Well, that explains a lot, doesn't it? I'll just step away from they keyboard.

And step towards books that you will read, and then back to the keyboard!

Cacto
Jan 29, 2009


I'm in for this week.

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010



Legit Cyberpunk

crabrock posted:

ok why don't you just rub it in a little

in

crabrock were you saying you wanted to brawl kaishai

was that what you were saying

Obliterati
Nov 13, 2012

Ask me about being the most Magnificent Bastard in EU4 Multiplayer.

kurona_bright posted:

Don't worry about it. I've had brain errors when it comes to sending email and stuff before, so it's not exactly the biggest surprise for me.


I know my story was DQ'd, but would you be willing to do that for me? I wrote "If At First...".

Your Sledgehammer posted:

Many thanks, I'm interested in a line-by-line crit. I guess now is the time for us to reveal which story we wrote?

Two of three.

crabrock
Aug 2, 2002


Grimey Drawer

sebmojo posted:

crabrock were you saying you wanted to brawl kaishai

was that what you were saying

let's just fast forward to the part where neither of us submit.

sebmojo
Oct 23, 2010



Legit Cyberpunk

crabrock posted:

let's just fast forward to the part where neither of us submit.

So, "no," then?

Shaky Premise
Nov 10, 2007
I will launch an attack with my Blitzkrieg Army of Bunnies.

Thanks for the crits. In this week.

Armack
Jan 27, 2006

Corde pulsum tangite


Obliterati posted:

Two of three.

I'm surprised that there's still a spot available by now. Sure, I'll claim three of three. I think I could really benefit from a line-by-line crit. Story: Whistleblowing.

crabrock
Aug 2, 2002


Grimey Drawer

i'm down for doing a couple too, later tonight, so speak up if you'd like one for the last week. generally i will have more to say the worse you did.

Tyrannosaurus
Apr 12, 2006

I failed to submit because I was so excited about New Zealander Tim Price winning the Burghley Horse Trials on the quirky but freakishly talented Ringwood Sky Boy

Hit me.

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Grizzled Patriarch
Mar 27, 2014

These dentures won't stop me from tearing out jugulars in Thunderdome.




I'll take one too.

I'll also pay it forward and offer two crits for anyone that wants 'em.

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