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violetdragon
Jul 27, 2006

RAWR


I agree that the minimalist version is the best, but you might want to rework the first paragraph or, at least, the first sentence, which is worded in an awkward way. It could probably also use a tiny bit more backstory about the series to give new readers a better idea of what's going on. It's difficult for me to make a suggestion without knowing the story, though. Is the galactic civil war still going on? Why are they fighting?

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violetdragon
Jul 27, 2006

RAWR


Bobby Deluxe posted:

Also making GBS threads myself as I just published my first erotica book. Five people downloaded trials from SB and one person Amazoned it the day after it went up. I have no idea what I'm doing.

What is SB?

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