Summer of 2006 (sci-fi) (1705 words)

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The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Summer of 2006 (sci-fi) (1705 words)

A1989 Honda Accord: Sep 9, 2014

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The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Summer of 2006 (sci-fi) (1705 words)