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Wangless Wonder posted:bowing out, in for next one w/ toxx same. 
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in with
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Apr 20, 2015 22:18
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You're on, bruh.
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Apr 24, 2015 00:55
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I'll take a graph crit!
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J.A.B.C. posted:A Distant Hand You have various spelling issues and your tenses are all over the place. I'm not sure your story has a conflict at any point. The protagonist was somewhat developed, but I didn't really give a poo poo about the pilot and her plight. I know you didn't have a lot of room to work with, but still. I expected the ending to be less telegraphed. That was disappointing. I didn't hate your story, but I didn't really find anything interesting in it either. Cache Cab posted:Cities Fall Yet Rivers Still Flow 960 Words. Thank your submitting your story, ''Cities Fall Yet Rivers Still Flow'' to Thunderdome Magazine. I'm sorry to say this is not a good story and I don't really know why you wrote it. The post apocalyptic Deliverance thing is interesting, but you spent way too many words trying to be edgy and not enough developing a plot other than ''A wizard kills two guys, or whatever, man.'' spectres of autism posted:Cloning Blues You've got some awkward phrasing and various spelling mistakes. Nothing a read-through wouldn't fix. I didn't mind the world building, although I would have preferred if you'd spent some time on creating something interesting in that world and not just made up names. The ending ''reveal'' was kinda interesting, so I wish you'd spent more than a couple of sentences on that rather than the fight scene. Decent.
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Your crits are bad and lazy, your reading comprehension is lacking. Let's duke it out.
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Entenzahn posted:Attn wizard week toxxers: I promised you wizard week crits but since there's been a fuckton of them flying around already I'll instead give you the pick of any of your TD entries. Just let me know what you want critted. I'll probably start going through the list by Sunday so if I haven't heard from you till then you get your regular old wizard crit. I'm letting you off the hook on mine because it's terrible. Unless you want to crit this week's entry.
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ravenkult fucked around with this message at 19:24 on Oct 22, 2015 |
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May 4, 2015 02:42
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in, flash me.
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May 19, 2015 19:38
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Entenzahn posted:
Thanks for the crit Ent!
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May 22, 2015 20:41
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I'm bowing out, for next week.
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May 24, 2015 23:34
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Sitting Here posted:
I can do 600 words. I'm in.
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ravenkult fucked around with this message at 19:24 on Oct 22, 2015 |
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May 28, 2015 04:36
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I'm in.
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Jun 30, 2015 07:43
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I'm bowing out. BAN ME
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Jul 6, 2015 01:07
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ravenkult fucked around with this message at 19:25 on Oct 22, 2015 |
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Jul 6, 2015 03:08
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A gentleman and a scholar. Thanks.
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Jul 15, 2015 15:11
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yo, spin that bitch
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Aug 25, 2015 20:30
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spin! (USER WAS BANNED FOR THIS POST)
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Aug 25, 2015 21:15
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I'm out, gents and ladies.
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In for the spoopy shenanigans.
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