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It's amazing and thank you for keeping it going. I hope our anti-hero can get some medical attention before he bleeds out.
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Feb 9, 2016 23:30
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This is loving excellent!
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Feb 10, 2016 13:43
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ReelBigLizard, when you aren't writing the story, are you sketching out ideas for the plot? Are you still flying by the seat of your pants and just writing what is coming to you? I'm just curious about your process. It seems like you're still having fun with the story right now.
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Feb 10, 2016 17:34
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This is wonderful - please keep it up!
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Feb 10, 2016 20:24
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Seat of the pants mostly. My process for writing stuff is to come up with three or four cool scenes, then just try to figure out how the characters are going to get dragged into them. This works well when writing for things like tabletop RPG, especially when you have a group of players like I do, who will do everything they can to go off-script. This is the first time I've tried to use this method for writing something longer though, and I think it's working pretty well so far. I'm definitely considering trying to make it to novel length, I'm a fifth of the way there already. It would probably get a re-write for consistency and cohesiveness in that case. Thanks for the comments guys. It's really encouraging. I wish I could spend more time writing it but I've got a fuckload of things going on.
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It's cool, man - whenever you have the time. Don't push it so much you start to hate or resent it or something.
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^^^What that guy said. I wouldn't say the story is disjointed, but I was curious how you were handling things. It seems like maybe you're going somewhere with it, but I'm mostly just curious.
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Take your time, you can't rush greatness! Bookmarks make it show up whenever there are updates, so just make it good.
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The scenery jumps a little but it's clear you're having fun writing it and that makes reading it enjoyable. Things that are fun to write are often fun to read 
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Necro'd from catching up on the Terrible Car Stuff thread. 5'd, sub'd. This is that Good poo poo. This is what I thought of for a soundtrack as soon as I started reading it, surprised no one linked it already. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SQSHg-SJXR8
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I’m relieved when I don’t throw up any blood. I try not to look at the dead shooter as I step over the body in the doorway, tracking bloody footprints through the diner. The CS spray is still in the air and I have to shield my face as I make my way to Lizzy. She’s getting up from behind the counter coughing in the acrid air. I try to put myself between her and the two dead attackers but it’s too late. Her panicked gaze wanders from the woman to the bloody mess in the doorway and she starts to hyperventilate, sucking in more CS, making it worse. “Lizzy, look at me.” I’m trying to speak in a reassuring tone. “Wh- What happened, to...” She’s looking around the diner now, at the destruction. “There was a fight Lizzy, you got knocked out. It’s over now. You’re OK.” “I can’t breathe!” She’s panicking. ”What’s wrong with me?” “CS Gas, pepper spray.” I say, guiding her towards the kitchen. “Let’s go out the back.” I don't consider myself a killer, but these two are far from the first, especially if you take into account the ones who died as a result of a few key presses on a military field terminal. The first time I had to kill a man was just a few months into my first deployment. We were operating a lightweight forward operating base from a compound at Al Mnajeer, providing Electronic Warfare support to local units. I had woken up at the sound of someone cutting into our tent with a box cutter. Hands shaking, I’d picked up the service rifle from beside my bed. Putting a burst into the dark figure as he leaned through the slit, his battered AKSU carbine in hand, the muzzle flash lit him up like a strobe in a nightclub. At that moment the compound had erupted in screams and gunfire. We ran out into the night, half dressed, to fight off the attack. We lost 3, but we weren't the only ones hit that night. Of the multiple bases and field units that were hit, the unifying factor was a sudden, unexplained malfunction of the sentries' night vision equipment. It was the first of many operations orchestrated by a new technologically advanced terror collective calling themselves The New Caliphate. They had obtained or developed an exploit affecting a digital image intensifier component common to the majority of our night vision equipment. There was a vulnerability in a part of the system used to visually identify friendly soldiers and vehicles. A carefully crafted series of pulses in infrared could crash the image processor, leaving the goggles inoperative until the batteries were removed for a hard reset. We would later recover some of the devices used to blind us that night, less than $20 worth of Chinese electronics junk; Namely an IR lamp intended for household security and a dirt-cheap hobby micro-controller, smaller than a saltine cracker. It took months to discover the nature of the vulnerability and then to recall and patch the devices. In that time de-mothballed 4th Generation night vision gear became worth it's weight in gold. Later on I found out; The kid was two years younger than me, from a quiet town just 40 miles from my childhood home in Aberdeenshire. He had run away from home to join the war after being radicalised by his older cousins. I was grateful that I never had to see the body. ====================== Thanks again for the kind words, sorry it's just a little nugget. It's been a busy few weeks. I'm considering talking to a buddy of mine who is a comic artist and illustrator, wondering if the story would work as a small graphic series.
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ReelBigLizard posted:Thanks again for the kind words, sorry it's just a little nugget. It's been a busy few weeks. I'm considering talking to a buddy of mine who is a comic artist and illustrator, wondering if the story would work as a small graphic series. A resounding gently caress yes - it's how I've been reading it in my head.
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Keep this poo poo up, it's amazing. You have gold, here.
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extreme_accordion posted:A resounding gently caress yes - it's how I've been reading it in my head. Yeah. I could definitely see this working in that medium. Good story man, looking forward to more!
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ReelBigLizard posted:Thanks again for the kind words, sorry it's just a little nugget. It's been a busy few weeks. I'm considering talking to a buddy of mine who is a comic artist and illustrator, wondering if the story would work as a small graphic series. It's your story, so you can make the call on how best to present it, but I'd say keep it as writing. You provide a ton of detail that lends itself to the imagination. The RRC will never look as sinister commited to paper as it already does in my mind. A lot of the satisfying richness of the world would be hard to translate into the visual medium. That said, if you have a definite end or checkpoint in mind for the current plot, it could definitely be compressed into a 100pg comic.
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W_rC-495Z_A
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Christ, I just found this. Ace stuff!
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I would really be disappointed if this hits archive status, so I'm going to bump it.
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I like that soundtrack.
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wallaka posted:I like that soundtrack. get your chillstep on, son https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=18NHV4nJLQc
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wallaka posted:I like that soundtrack. https://www.reddit.com/r/Vaporwave/ Simpsons is the latest Vaporwave meta.
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For whatever reason I found myself reading a 'hack' recap on pastebin and thought of this story. http://pastebin.com/raw/0SNSvyjJ If that isn't good fodder I'm not sure what is.
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This poo poo is amazing. Really hope you plan on dropping some more.
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This rocks. ReelBigLizard posted:I turn south towards ‘home’. It’s a light industrial unit on the outskirts that was condemned by the city a few years ago. I’m already getting prepped to move on, it’s scheduled for redevelopment into housing early next year. I'm a bit unclear where this scene fits though; it's after he gets the package but before the highway chase, yet the end of the previous posts seems like it leads directly into the chase with no room for a breather. Just an oversight? Anyway great job so far, looking forward to living this out irl after you and I get drafted into the Grand European Army to fight off the technomuslims.
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^^^ I'm pretty sure that scene is after the chase. He has to torch it because he's been compromised. Just found this while reading backlogged terrible car stuff. This owns, I hope ReelBigLizard continues it.
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Every time I see a new post in this thread I get excited. Thanks for teasing me.
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5'd and subscribed! This is lovely and I'm glad it's getting linked around CA.
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Made me think of this thread: http://jalopnik.com/how-this-obscure-anime-predicted-so-much-about-the-futu-1780951876
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kimbo305 posted:Made me think of this thread: That anime kicked rear end to teenage me, and you are totally right; it's what made me love this thread in the first place.
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i still need this
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atomicthumbs posted:i still need this 
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You got my hopes up.
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Ditto, now there's four new posts and people are going to get so worked up.
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5 people wanting updates, people seeing thread will get their hopes up just that much more!
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6! LOL.
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Can we just lock this thread and let it die already? It's pretty clear the OP isn't going to finish his story (please come back  ) and every time it gets resurrected I get my hopes up.
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RBL is very busy escaping my burning wreck of a country and I'd rather he get that on lockdown while he can so that he can be alive to write more cyberwank in the future instead of having to come back here and become an active participant in the norsefire hellscape we're careening towards.
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Renaissance Robot posted:RBL is very busy escaping my burning wreck of a country and I'd rather he get that on lockdown while he can so that he can be alive to write more cyberwank in the future instead of having to come back here and become an active participant in the norsefire hellscape we're careening towards. Thank you for that, I don't think many of us knew anything about that. Pass on our best wishes if you talk to him anytime soon.
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