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anime was right posted:flerp (1 word) archive this please
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I wrote some crits for some of yalls terrible 219 entries but I think they got buried under submissions. loving read or don’t I don’t give a poo poo: https://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3758791&userid=0&perpage=40&pagenumber=111#post465661831 some 220 crits widespread Comma splices. Comma splices everywhere. I know why you’re doing this poo poo, too. Just because you’d pause there when you’re saying the sentence outloud does not mean that you need to insert a comma. Cut it out. It’s loving annoying to read. I get the feeling you’re a pretty natural story teller in real life. That’s good. Uhhh… I don’t know what the point of this was. Nothing is important. You just stumble around an idea and the shoehorn in some wierd “I can’t lie anymore” poo poo. llamagucci First section is weird in a good way. A little hard to read but interesting enough that I forgive it. Octopussian is a nice touch. “I was nervous.” Dont- don’t do that. Show me. Don’t tell me. And especially don’t follow it up by having the interviewer look nervously from the hiring packet to the face. Why would that dude also be nervous? Doesn’t make sense. Whaaaaaaaat that’s where you ended? Did you run out of time? You should have used your full word count because I’m interested in where you were going. Hawklad Haha I dig it man Edit your poo poo before your submit JABC Your biggest crime here is that you actually came up with an interesting setting and then wrote the most boring story you possibly could. 1)Oh no something is in the vent 2) Oh wow its people they live here 3) End There was no conflict or character development. This was just a vignette about a strange incident but it was nowhere near weird enough to hold up on its own. The whole thing seemed far too casual. Give me some stakes. Some drama. Some… something. Anything. Your idea was good. Don’t let it die like this. BeefSupreme Tough prompt Perfect recordings bit made me laugh. I’m halfway through and I like the world you’ve created. I’m afraid you’re not going to go anywhere with this story, though. drat I was right. Good news? You created a cool setting and I briskly read through your story and enjoyed myself. Bad news? Nothing happened here. You just pasted together a bunch of pretty words without having them mean anything. You need a conflict. You need a character that learns something or changes over the course of story. Read SaddestRhino’s entry. I don’t necessarily think its great story but it gives a nice arc. You need to work on making an arc.
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I am IN for this spooky Halloween prompt!
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Oct 27, 2016 16:32
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Tuesday Afternoon 250 words --see archive-- Tyrannosaurus fucked around with this message at 16:20 on Jan 2, 2017 |
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KnHGbWYzHz0 Slaughter 750 words --see archive-- Tyrannosaurus fucked around with this message at 16:20 on Jan 2, 2017 |
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My only experience with that accent is through comedians so I kept waiting for the story to be funny.
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To Open On The Day You Graduate Highschool 690 words --see archive-- Tyrannosaurus fucked around with this message at 16:20 on Jan 2, 2017 |
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Fuubi posted:In with T-Rex. thats wassup
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Nov 16, 2016 16:03
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because of last weeks failure to deliver.
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fast judging is good judging and this was good judging
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Nov 22, 2016 16:07
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Good.
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Could someone do me a favor and copy paste my story from a Google doc? I can't seem to do it from my phone
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Nobody Wants to Die Here in the Strip Club 1068 words --see archive-- Tyrannosaurus fucked around with this message at 16:22 on Jan 2, 2017 |
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Mrenda you're cool.
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Thunderdome 2017: Everyone dies. No one writes well.
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Thunderdome 2017teen: Write Short Stories Win No Prizes
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Thunderdome 2017teen: words are a bitch
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docbeard posted:Thunderdome 2017: Write A drat Thing
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Thunderdome 2017teen: my god this isn't hard just write more
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