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a new study bible! posted:hello.
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# ¿ Jan 11, 2017 05:44 |
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# ¿ Jan 17, 2025 11:29 |
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Sneaking in last minute.
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# ¿ Jan 14, 2017 08:39 |
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https://thunderdome.cc/?story=5427&title=Rite+of+Passage
curlingiron fucked around with this message at 04:48 on Dec 29, 2017 |
# ¿ Jan 16, 2017 07:58 |
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yeah, let's go in
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# ¿ Jan 21, 2017 05:48 |
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To What End We Know Not 116 words Thunder sings its dark refrain An epitaph to dreaming dead As static hisses through my veins The hourglass’ ever fewer grains Pay no heed to all the words we’ve said Thunder sings its dark refrain A fear from deep within me strains Against the world that lies ahead As static hisses in my veins The truth upon the soul it stains The path of memory untread Thunder sings its dark refrain What hands are there that hold the reins? What future still that can’t be fled? As static hisses through my veins The walker now a path attains Although it fills the heart with dread Thunder sings its dark refrain As static hisses through my veins
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# ¿ Jan 23, 2017 04:51 |
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Okay, I guess I should do this since I'm halfway through writing my entry already. I am in.
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# ¿ Feb 3, 2017 21:42 |
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https://thunderdome.cc/?story=5485&title=Damsels+%26+Diplomacy
curlingiron fucked around with this message at 04:49 on Dec 29, 2017 |
# ¿ Feb 6, 2017 01:34 |
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CAT LADY DOG WEEK CRITS Okay, so first of all, shoutout to all of the failures this week; I’m not sure what possessed me to volunteer to judge on the last week of school, but I really appreciate you guys making this easy for me. Did you break flerp's heart and let everyone down? Yes. BUT it meant that I had less work to do, so we'll call this one even. Gonna Explode So I guess this is trying to be some kind of commentary on attention and media? I liked the premise, but it seemed a little preachy at the end. Plus, there was a lot that didn’t really make sense. For example, when and how were they performing all of these surgeries on her? Were they doing surgery while she was running? Did they somehow prepare and enact all of these measures during Hell Day? If they have such insanely advanced medical technology, couldn’t they like, idk, put the alien-earth-breaking-leg-thingy in something else? Idk. This really doesn’t seem like something people would leave to chance. The other judges liked this more than I did, but I didn’t think it was bad, per se, just a little contrived and preachy (to my ears). Fogdog I really wanted to like this story more than I did. I had you as a potential DM because this was pretty muddy, but I really liked the ideas you tried to communicate, and the DM would really have only been comparative; this was a low story for this week, but not particularly low in the grand scheme of TD stories. I think the main thing that you could improve upon is clarity here; what exactly is happening? What… actually, no, just what’s happening. The shell world thing was weird, and I honestly wouldn’t have figured it out if it weren’t for you talking about it in IRC. I’d love to see you expand on this and polish it a bit, because you have some really interesting stuff going on here, it just needs some work (and probably a few hundred more words). Arm the Man With a Dog This was going to be my win pick if seb hadn’t skated in under the deadline. Not necessarily because it was overwhelmingly good, but because I liked it the most out of the other stories, which wasn’t saying that much, tbh. You have a sort of fast-and-loose style going for you here, and I liked how you played with archetypes and myths, but there wasn’t that much going on, and there was exactly zero narrative tension or stakes. One of the other judges mentioned that the whole thing read like a setup for the Disney joke, and in retrospect, they’re right. Your breezy style here is really almost all the story has going for it, but luckily for you I liked it. Some Fables Man, I have no idea what the hell just happened here. Seriously, I don’t know if it was a dream-within-a-dream, or a dream-but-not-really, or just-a-dream-OR-WAS-IT?!?!?! Whatever it was, it didn’t work for me. The second person really didn’t help, either. I think you were trying to go for surrealism, but it came out jumbled and nigh-incomprehensible. This didn’t deserve a loss by any means (for real, in the grand scheme of TD, this is not bad at all), but I was okay with giving it a DM. I’d probably scrap the whole thing and do a complete rewrite, if it were, me, but I do think that there are a lot of elements that you could keep here and make a compelling story. Snow White I liked this well enough, although it didn’t have a lot of feeling to it (for me). Your ending probably also could have been a little clearer. It wasn’t bad by any means, but it felt a little lifeless. I didn’t care really about Tyler or the dog, so the fate of either one didn’t matter very much to me, and that made it hard to invest. I think that the structure is there, but the story itself was held back by the low word count. You can definitely make something worthwhile out of this, it just needs a little more room to breathe. Narcissus This was a case of me not being 100% in on what was going on in a story, but I was super into it anyway. There was a very compelling sort of mystery to what was happening, and while I didn’t quite understand who Little My was and what her purpose/significance was, I understood enough that the story worked and the points hit home. I liked this. I think in most weeks it would probably be closer to an HM contender than a win, but it was definitely my favorite of this week, so good on you.
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# ¿ Jun 19, 2017 22:11 |
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Okay, I have Friday off and I haven't witten anything in way too long. Let's go in with a
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# ¿ Oct 11, 2017 03:05 |
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https://thunderdome.cc/?story=6015&title=Whatever+Floats+Your+Boat
curlingiron fucked around with this message at 04:50 on Dec 29, 2017 |
# ¿ Oct 16, 2017 07:01 |
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INTERPROMPT: Man Agonizes over Tomatoes 200 words
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# ¿ Oct 23, 2017 17:37 |
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Sitting Here posted:cptn picard looked up at the kardashian and screamed THERE. ARE. FOUR. TOMATOES. lol Star Trek reference Please ascend to the Blood Throne, GoonSir[ess]
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# ¿ Oct 23, 2017 21:07 |
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Less social commentary, more Tomato/Star Trek erotic fanfic, please. e: prompt??????????????
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# ¿ Oct 24, 2017 06:01 |
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sebmojo posted:nup, as many words as you need Enjoy your 17000 word brawl entries.
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# ¿ Oct 26, 2017 14:55 |
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Yeah, but it's no sock-puppet show.
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# ¿ Nov 9, 2017 16:50 |
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# ¿ Jan 17, 2025 11:29 |
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Thank you to Nethilia for my lovely presents! Here's Emperor Tang posing with his new brother(?) and the awesome socks! Don't worry, he knocked everything over shortly afterwards. Also, sorry I asked for the most complicated possible type of story. Take your time, and I'm excited to read it! See you soon for TD meets, maybe? curlingiron
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# ¿ Dec 27, 2017 02:27 |