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PurdWerfect posted:I have zero knowledge of poetry but I like words alot. Anyway, this is recent. Critique away. Hi. circling back to this poem. I really like these four bolded lines. like they are really good. you've got great imagery and theme going with them. the other ones, maybe they have some imagery and maybe they advance the theme, but they're either kind of pretentiously worded (presence of teeth is promise of fangs, what the heck that's not a sentence!!), or they aren't that clear (also see above). each and every line needs to pack a punch so something like "high and low then snapped back to middle" is just too empty for me
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