NoButterUtter posted:

Oh dear, I'm a non-native english writer and long time lurker. I do have a full story, 4500 words. I plan to submit the swedish version to my "publisher" in a few days, after doing another revision (It's a small but hard-working swedish publisher, and he does release some of my short stories in E-book and audiobook format). I've also done a translation in English. It's a kind of darrrrrrk and grrrrim fantasy/horror story, and it's actually based on the lyrics of one of the songs for our crappy doomish-stonerish metal band. It's called "Smoke on the bog"... yeah, you get the pun. Actually, it's not about that kind of "smoke". Anyway, we're thinking about releasing the song on our up-and-coming first album, perhaps as a single, so I imagine that some kind of co-release of the short story would be cool. At least we can re-use the artwork.

Is there someone who would be interested in looking at this story? The main thing would be pointing out blatant grammatical faults, and terrible misuse of words. I often realize exactly what mistakes I've done as soon as I become aware of them, but I seem to miss a lot of stuff. If you have suggestions for the story itself, go ahead. So, a non-english dude trying to do a bloody and creepy, but still aloof, Borges in English. How bad can it be?

If I've understood everything correct, the thing to do is start a new thread and paste a link to a google doc, right?

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1LHM4YwodZ8nvVL7aJBxOCihLTq5kWnfyQcRIHs_0YAE

Edit: now the google doc is open for comments... sorry