Poem Dome: Getting Tough on Rhyme Crime

The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Poem Dome: Getting Tough on Rhyme Crime

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Look at these sad goons,
About to learn that they suck.
That is; count me in.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K7-2_gUuWK4

# ¿ Nov 13, 2019 08:49

Adbot: ADBOT LOVES YOU

# ¿ Apr 26, 2024 11:30

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Ink

# ¿ Nov 16, 2019 15:08

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Ta! It's been something I've loved to watch since I started using a fountain pen, I'd been toying with the idea of doing something based on it, and this was the perfect opportunity.

# ¿ Nov 16, 2019 22:09

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

I love how nearly everyone's gone 'up to five verses? bollocks to that, super-minimalism time!'

# ¿ Nov 20, 2019 18:49

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Next time, Armack! :argh:

(Grats on the win

)

# ¿ Nov 21, 2019 21:05

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

In. Any advice for where to start looking for ancient pomes?

# ¿ Nov 22, 2019 07:24

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

What I'm getting from reading Sappho is that she really needed to get laid.

lofi fucked around with this message at 21:23 on Nov 22, 2019

# ¿ Nov 22, 2019 21:20

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Bath Bomb

"You may forget but let me tell you this:
someone in some future time will think of us."
-Sappho

Filthy midwinter evening
Gnaws at the double glazing.
I'm laying in steaming water
Watching my bath bomb fizz,
Trying to word this poem
About what we've done to the world
And what I'd say to the future.
I'm not sure they'd care
For an addicts' justifications
And I'm not sure what I could say
Except:
Sorry about all the fire.
(It spoiled my bath too.)

# ¿ Nov 26, 2019 18:55

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

"You snooze
you lose
biatch"
- Sappho

I mean, if you don't mind slapping your massive lack of originality out on the desk for everyone to see, I guess there's nothing stopping you using the same bit as me. :cheeky:

Just make sure to credit me in your 'poem'.

lofi fucked around with this message at 22:51 on Nov 26, 2019

# ¿ Nov 26, 2019 22:47

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Come at me, brah.

# ¿ Nov 27, 2019 02:52

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

You're on. :toxx:

Still up for judging sephiroth IRA?

# ¿ Nov 27, 2019 23:17

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Saucy_Rodent posted:

Oh, and Lofi, brawl me.

What pronouns would you prefer to be abused with?

# ¿ Nov 28, 2019 05:19

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

In, though I'll need to pick a track when I'm at my desk.

# ¿ Nov 29, 2019 01:38

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

I'd like tracks: 1) Tears, 2) Cynic.

Oh yeah, while you're reading this rodent... *ahem*

quote:

POME BRAHWL WIT RODENT

I'll give him this, his 'poem' made me cry -
With laughter, that description was a crime.
It felt like getting grit in my mind's eye.

This is a guy who thinks 'have ate' is fine
Made this week's king, so here's his coup d'�tat;
It's time to storm your Groverhaus of rhyme.

This fool has called himself a horny rat,
But all I see from here is mouse pur�e
Smeared out below Sappho as though she shat.

# ¿ Nov 29, 2019 17:04

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Don't doxx me pls.

(Do you pronounce 'poem' with one syllable? Fuckin heathen.)

# ¿ Nov 29, 2019 18:55

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Ta for the judging and brawling! I thought I did do iambic pentameter though?

Am I missing something, it's 'off-beat / beat' five times, right?

(Also a she not a he)

# ¿ Nov 30, 2019 10:51

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Thankyou! I think tbh it's mostly a case of me not skilled enough to be able to dissect my own work accurately. I feel like a puppy having it's nose rubbed in it's poop and not being able to understand why all the humans turned nasty! I'm gonna get better, though, that's why I'm here.

Always up for a rematch and/or more brawling.

# ¿ Nov 30, 2019 11:30

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Bitch I just got finished warming up, bring it.

Do you want lyrics for the whole thing, or just a segment? I think the idea of writing 3m of rhymes might be intimidating some folks.

# ¿ Nov 30, 2019 22:05

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Ooh, big crits! Thanks!

# ¿ Dec 1, 2019 19:55

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

ffs, now I gotta write another verse :colbert:

# ¿ Dec 2, 2019 18:14

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Well gently caress, looks like yall are slower on the draw again. I have no idea how to format this poo poo, so I put timestamps to keep you vaugely on-track reading it.

quote:

Lyrics for 'Eternal LFight': https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B2l0rFYKjjo-bzhLOGs5REh0WDQ/view

code:

10 	gently caress your teams, it's a free for all, I still got poo poo to sling leftover from my brawl
	Nasty brighton bitch I'm still standing tall, two good beatings, zero falls.
	My mettle's tested, forged and hard, you're a bunch of kids fresh in from the yard.
	I'm fighting trim, you're gamer lard, I came in bruised, you'll go out scarred.
30 	Too many scrubs for one verse each, so gather round and let me teach:
	Hi there children, want some? let's go: I flow, you squeak in falsetto
	With playground rhyme, try hurt my pride, but like any goon, I'm dead inside.
	Dropping bombs like it was judgement day, and all you've got in response is child's play.
53	Bring
	It
	On
	You
	Fucks

# ¿ Dec 3, 2019 19:12

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Nice! I was thinking of "I wondered lonely as a ~~cloud~~ goon".

Can I request next week we do something a bit lighter? 2 poo poo-talkings in a row is making me hungry for a change.

# ¿ Dec 3, 2019 23:15

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Who is walt?

# ¿ Dec 4, 2019 04:26

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

I'll stick it on the list!

At the moment I think the tag is a bit more tcc than cc, yeah.

# ¿ Dec 4, 2019 04:42

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Too fast flashing, depending how obnoxious you're aiming for.

# ¿ Dec 4, 2019 06:46

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Looking good!

# ¿ Dec 4, 2019 11:07

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

You just couldn't handle my power, clearly.

# ¿ Dec 5, 2019 16:16

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

idgi either. free verse it is! in and :toxx:

me a subject!

# ¿ Dec 6, 2019 06:47

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Nice, on it.

# ¿ Dec 7, 2019 00:17

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

nailed it.

# ¿ Dec 8, 2019 11:13

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

To Solitude

Crowds press like ocean depths.
Abyssal weight and eyes that bulge,
Fangs gape in unhinged mouths,
Bloated death-pale flesh shudders.
In the cold currents
Where no light dares reach
A vortex of abominations
Mindlessly grasps for me.

But oh! Here is my castle.
Alabaster walls to protect me
And an unbreachable lid closed tight,
To hold me safe inside its sculpted fist.
And here, secluded within my shell,
I can finally become a pearl.

The shrieking mob will never know
The calm of being still.
They writhe around and into each other,
I am discrete.
Their howling as they
Claw at my walls
Only proves me correct.

# ¿ Dec 9, 2019 18:01

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Signups?! Lol, I totally misread, thought that was the submission deadline. Oh well, done early.

# ¿ Dec 10, 2019 13:57

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

# ¿ Dec 12, 2019 05:13

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

gently caress yeah middle of the pack baby, check me out! Getting better!

# ¿ Dec 13, 2019 03:40

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

cda posted:

Ode to Losing

drat, colour me surprised, I thought yours was great. Too jokey for the judge, I guess? Or they objected to you stealing my prompt.

# ¿ Dec 14, 2019 00:04

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

Sorry, not got time this week!

# ¿ Dec 16, 2019 23:18

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

In. Two weeks would be better for me, but I can manage one.

e: not my entry, but this is fun -

https://forums.somethingawful.com/showthread.php?threadid=3266265&userid=0&perpage=40&pagenumber=2#post372450711 posted:

A Process

You know those people who digest anything?
We have always Eaten.
Our dinners were usually
A whole bunch of locals.

It sounded like a pretty good way
To mess yourself up.
Raw paleo
Raw meat
A slew of raw meat and organs
Choked down and digested
My stomach is all.

After a few months
We really noticed the difference
All kinds of things were normal

Stomach is supposed to feel like...
Raw
Carnivore
Carnivores
Living outdoors
Heading back into canadian winters
For the meat that we eat
Rotten since your tastes change
Your idea of fresh meat is now aged meat
More
Flavour
As people develop taste.
Eating Rotten Meat
Eating
Euphoric
No interest in anything
That isn't animal
Fat is gold
Your body goes through a process
Learning to eat
The whole animal
Brains to the feet

tl:dr; raw meat is the tits.

lofi fucked around with this message at 20:27 on Dec 20, 2019

# ¿ Dec 20, 2019 17:44

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

A Wild Animal posted:

I dared to wish upon a star
My manly beast roars Harrr! Harrr! Harrr!
She tears her shirt apart; I see
Her cleavage
Waiting there for me

What was the original for that?

lofi fucked around with this message at 12:56 on Dec 28, 2019

# ¿ Dec 28, 2019 11:14

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

A Wild Animal posted:

By what do you mean, Original?

I thought you were entering for the found poetry challenge, so I meant what was the thing you edited into poetry.

lofi fucked around with this message at 12:59 on Dec 28, 2019

# ¿ Dec 28, 2019 11:35

Adbot: ADBOT LOVES YOU

# ¿ Apr 26, 2024 11:30

lofi: Apr 2, 2018

A Wild Animal posted:

My own thoughts; and one magical night in a Motel room.

Ah. This thread isn't a general poetry thread, though I'm not sure where misc poems would go - if you have a few poems, you could make a thread for them?

lofi fucked around with this message at 12:59 on Dec 28, 2019

# ¿ Dec 28, 2019 12:22

The Something Awful Forums > The Finer Arts > Creative Convention > Poem Dome: Getting Tough on Rhyme Crime

«‹›2 »