indigi posted:

What was the original story

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Young Annikin Starkiller, son of former Jedi Bendu Kane Starkiller, is leaving their homeworld Utapau in the Kessil system for Aquilae, a planet which is still independent of the New Galactic Empire.

Aquilae, home of Princess Leia, is targeted by the Empire for conquest due to its advanced cloning technologies. The Aquilaen King learns of the plot from one of his spies, Clieg Whitsun, who is an operative on the Imperial capital planet Alderaan. In defense of his world, the Aquilaen King attacks the Empire's Space Fortress, causing a pair of droids to crash down into the inhospitable Jundland Wastes region of the planet.

The King dies shortly thereafter, moving Princess Leia into the position of the Empire's target for a puppet ruler. Annikin Starkiller is now Padawan to Luke Skywalker, and the pair travel to protect the Princess. After rescuing her, the pair lead her through the Jundland Wastes to the spaceport town Gordon, where they meet Han Solo, a Urellian, a tall reptilian with a reputation for hunting Wookiees on their home planet of Yavin.

Solo, an old friend of Kane Starkiller, charters a freighter off-world, captained by an individual named Valorum. While escaping from Imperial patrols, Kane dies sacrificing himself to save the others, and Valorum is revealed as a Sith Knight.

After escaping from Valorum by stealing an Imperial ship, the protagonists are chased through an asteroid field and forced to land on the Wookiee homeworld. There they align with the Wookiees, who are in the midst of fighting Urellians, and meet a Wookiee named Chewbacca. The group gathers at the home of a pair of anthropologists, Owen and Beru Lars, while Leia is recaptured by Imperial forces and taken to the Space Fortress.

Rushing back to Aquilae to save Leia, Annikin dons stormtrooper armor to infiltrate the Space Fortress, but is captured in the process. A largely off-screen Darth Vader orders Valorum to kill Starkiller, but Valorum has a change of heart and sets Starkiller free. Starkiller rescues Leia and escapes just in time, as Luke Skywalker leads a squadron of fighters piloted by Wookiees to destroy the Space Fortress.

Returning to Aquilae, now-Queen Leia appoints Annikin Starkiller "Lord Protector of Aquilae."

Robot Style posted:

And that's not even getting into the rough outlines and notes he had before actually putting a script together.

His first attempt was called "The Journal of the Whills", and is just a handwritten outline that's basically The Phantom Menace with some names changed. It follows Jedi Bendu Mace Windy and his Padawaan CJ Thorpe on a mission to investigate the planet Yoshiro, which has been annexed by the Empire. In order to save the planet, the Jedi need to protect Prince Luke Starkiller, and along the way they gain the aid of the planet's amphibious natives after befriending one named Han Solo.

His next full outline has more detail, and is a bit more recognizable as "Star Wars", but there's no battle against the Death Star, and the movie ends with the rescue of the princess because the second act was taken up by Return of the Jedi's Ewok shenanigans.

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Cartoon Man posted: