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Simbyotic
Aug 24, 2010

THUNDERDOME LOSER
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Simbyotic
Aug 24, 2010

THUNDERDOME LOSER
Matter and antimatter
886 words

Do you know, Tanya, that when matter and antimatter come close they start orbiting one another, almost as a dance, inching closer and closer until, finally, just as theyíre about to touch, they annihilate each other and release a tremendous amount of energy in the process.

Marcus, what the gently caress does that have to do with what weíre arguing about?

Couldnít think of a better metaphor for our relationship.

Let me guess, weíre at the annihilation stage? Is that what youíre trying to say?

I wasnít trying to say anything, really, or I wasnít until the words came out of my mouth. Iím tired, Tanya. Iím tired. Iím tired of always being in a fight with you. Iím tired of dreading having to come back home knowing weíll end up fighting. Iím done.

Youíre done? YouÖ Youíre breaking up with me? Uh... Who is she, uh Marcus? Whoís the oval office? Donít lie to me you slimy gently caress, I know for a fact itís not dread thatís making you come back home so late.

Howíd you know?

A woman knows.

Really? A woman knows? Female intuition, thatís whatís done me in?

Yeah, thatís right, a woman knows. I know. Wanna know how I know? You donít make love to me anymore. It took me a while to figure it out, but when it did everything made sense. Oh, we have sex, thatís not what Iím talking about, but not like we used to. Itís like a punishment to you now. Your weekly penitence.

Tanya, I Ė

Who is she Marcus?

Someone from work. A lab technician. Youíve never met her. Actually, she was there at the Christmas party, though you were too distracted guzzling alcohol by the bottle to notice much of anything going on around you.

You were already seeing her back then, then?

No. Thatís when I first met her. After I called a cab to drive you home. I went back to the party. She was at the bar by herself.

Let me get this straight. After you threw your girlfriend, drunk, into the back of some strangersí car, you saw a bimbo all by her lonely self at the bar and decided that that day would be the day you were finally going to gently caress another woman?

We didnít gently caress. Not back then anyway. We talked. Thatís all we did, we talked through the night. When I got home you were still asleep, next to a pile of your own vomit and reeking of alcohol.

Is that how youíve rationalized the fact that youíre cheating on me, Marcus? Because at a sleazy corporate Christmas party I made good use of the open bar?

gently caress, Tanya. You have no idea how it feels to be with you. I look at you and still see that college girl drunk on her newfound freedom, that girl who thought letting the hair in her armpits grow is how you stick it to the man. God, I loved you then Tanya, I truly did. I just loved your energy, that wildness. Now? I look at you and see someone whoís stuck. Someone who thinks sheís still in college living with her friends on a clandestine feminist sorority. You havenít changed one bit. Tell me, when was the last time you held down a job for more than three months? I canít even tell if youíre still looking for a job or if you just tell me youíre sending out job applications to shut me up. You watch television and smoke pot, thatís all you do. Every day. You donít even paint anymore. So, yes, I cheated on you. And yes, Iím breaking up with you. Itís over.

What are you talking about? You were the one who told me to take time off after what happenedÖ You know how much that exhibition meant to me. Todayís the day you decide to lay all your cards out, uh. Figures. Why did I expect any different? Today of all days...

What are you talking about?

You were just biding your time, werenít you? You never wanted me to continue working on my art. Not after you abandoned yours. When you look at me, itís not stasis you see. Thatís what you tell yourself so you don't have to peer deeper. No, Marcus, you look at me and you see proof of your own cowardice. You see that I never gave up, never. Not like you did.

I loving hate you, Tanya. I truly doÖ Art? You think thatís what this is all about? You think Iím breaking up with you because I am jealous of you sitting around all day doing nothing? Look around you Tanya. You think I want to go back to living in drafty old houses with barely enough money to make rent? Weíre not twenty anymore. All of this, all of this exists because I, not you, went and made something of myself. This couch, that kitchen, the bed you so enjoy sleeping in, all of this, all of it, exists because I, not you, bust myself off at work. It took me loving another woman to realize how much of a child you still are.

MarcusÖ listen, I -

Pack up your things and get out. I want you out of my life.

Iím pregnant.

Simbyotic
Aug 24, 2010

THUNDERDOME LOSER
In, with the Island of the God Watchers pretty please.

Also, thanks for the critiques. Azza Bamboo the "today of all days" line was supposed to be a foreshadowing of the announcement of her being pregnant but now that I've stepped away from it for a while it doesn't work that well. crabrock You're totally right, I didn't realize I was structuring it in a question - response - question - response way, thanks for pointing it out, something to be mindful of going forward! Casual Encountess Yeah, I initially read the deadline as a deadline for signing up and not for publishing the story itself, only afterward I realized I'd screwed up. All is good, still wrote something.

Btw where can I find a Discord invite link?

Simbyotic
Aug 24, 2010

THUNDERDOME LOSER
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Simbyotic
Aug 24, 2010

THUNDERDOME LOSER
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