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Foolster41 posted:Yeah, she is kind of passive in this story. Mainly the story is about the descision she makes at the end... I tried to make it feel like she's desciding (going back and forth between wanting to go back or not), but maybe I didn't spend enough time on the decision. There is no decision. Her father is A Bad Guy (tm) and she has no attachments to anything else. If she had a difficult decision to make, she'd be deciding between two equally compelling options. You go out of your way to make her life on the surface seem extra crappy, so there's no impact when she decides to leave it behind. She sacrifices nothing and gets a better life anyway. No decision, no conflict, no story.
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