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Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Been lurking a while, making a play for the chalice.

Your bot is a miserable exercise in impoverished imitation. If it can cough up something that doesn't sound like a middle-school band of mouth-breathing virgins who just discovered Lovecraft, I'm in.

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Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Maugrim posted:

Dreams Of Apocalyptic Parasite

I take it back, apparently there's nothing wrong with the Grimbot and the shittiness of the original prompt set can be blamed on operator error.

I'm in, I'll take the flash rule, and for the further glory of Satan I'll slaughter this goat in 900 rather than 930 words.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Your Sledgehammer posted:

you don't take flash rules, you are given them.

If someone gives you something, do you not take it from them? Are you trying to make a semantic argument here, or are you just being pedantic for the exercise?

Your Sledgehammer posted:

Here's hoping you don't fall flat on your face. (Spoiler alert: You probably will. It's OK, though; you've got about 50 more tries in this thread to get it right.)

I suppose we'll have to see about that.

Your Sledgehammer posted:

This is Thunderdome, not the Unicorn Farts and Rainbows Hugbox for the Emotionally Challenged.

Yeah, we'll see about that one too.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...ast+Corpsewitch

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 18:59

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...77&title=Debris

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:00

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Interprompt

June 17
199 words

"...yeah. I love you too. Bye." Cayla hung up. This was the worst part of every year. Evening of June 17th, after the annual phone call with the parents, when Cayla was left alone with her box of Gracie's things. Photos mostly, some originals she'd taken from her parents' collection, some crappy scans she'd printed on a long-since broken down inkjet printer. And a pair of ballet slippers, practically brand new. For some reason the slippers drew Cayla more and more as the years passed; there was something about the physicality that seemed more real than the photos. Years ago, Cayla could really remember what her sister was like as a kid, like real scenes. Now when she thought of Gracie, she just saw the photos, static and devoid of context. The slippers were different somehow, but Cayla couldn't put a finger on why. She'd taken three weeks of ballet before it happened. Who knows if she would have stuck with it, or given it up for soccer or something. Cayla knew she was just projecting onto the person Gracie had been, that these weren't real memories, but Cayla liked to hold the shoes anyway, and imagine Gracie dancing.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In with The Steadfast Tin Soldier.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Thank you Maugrim -- that was definitely worth the wait, I really appreciate the careful critique and I agree with every point you've raised here.




Oxford comma 4 lyfe.

e: vvvvv Thanks for the linecrit, Seb, lots of really helpful stuff in there. Much appreciated!

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Jan 30, 2015 around 15:47

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...+Man+In+Uniform

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:01

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...le=Right+of+Way

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:03

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



The Difference Between Noir and Hardboiled

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...&title=Sardines

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:04

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Weevil is the god of small things and unknown spaces. He lives in the cracks of the world, wherever overlooked boundaries may be found. He offers opportunity to those who would remain hidden, and brings slow ruin to the edifices of the mighty and proud.



Also, linecrits are a good thing. I am offering two line-by-line critiques, to be completed within one week, with the only catch being that anybody claiming a crit must themselves pay two forward. That is, if you take a crit, you must offer two linecrits of your own, each to be completed within a week of their being claimed. I will happily crit any story, not just those from the most recent week, so please provide a link to the story you would like critiqued when claiming a crit slot.

2-for-1 Linecrits

1. Grizzled Patriarch, http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...+We+Meet+Again. (to be completed before 3/2/15)
2. Benny the Snake, http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...+Cheated+Winter (due date TBD)

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Feb 23, 2015 around 19:22

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...&title=Patience

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:05

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Benny Profane posted:

2-for-1 Linecrits

1. Grizzled Patriarch, http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...+We+Meet+Again. (to be completed before 3/2/15)
2. Unclaimed

You got it. One more left if anybody wants it.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Benny the Snake posted:

Brother, can you spare a crit for my current submission?

Sure, I can do that -- I won't start until judgment for this week comes in, though. And just a reminder that it's chain-letter mechanics, so if you take one you have to pay two forward.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Edited out linecrit for thread closure.

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Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Edited out linecrit for thread closure.

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:07

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...5&title=Goliath

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:08

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In for this week with The Mesopotamians.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jAMRTGv82Zo

Also, thanks for the linecrit, GrizzledPatriarch! I'm happy to pay one forward if anybody would like one.

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Mar 3, 2015 around 21:57

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Edited out linecrit for thread closure

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Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...=Babylon+And+On

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:09

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...e+Flying+Tailor

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:10

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



SurreptitiousMuffin posted:

Extras for experts: you may request flash rules from me, but they will not be easy flash rules. Oh no no no.

Flash me.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...e=The+Reduction

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:11

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



Edited out linecrit for thread closure

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:12

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...e=A+Funny+Story

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:13

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...%5C%27s+Wedding

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:14

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Feb 23, 2012



in

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...8&title=Preface

Barnaby Profane fucked around with this message at Dec 30, 2015 around 19:15

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gz-xmICHCK4

In.

Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



http://writocracy.com/thunderdome/?...rds+Mo+Problems

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Barnaby Profane
Feb 23, 2012



In with

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U1td70yaoS8

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